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Martie
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0 posted 2002-03-06 12:18 PM



Her Song

See that girl all blush and thin
See the sky that dangles
At the edge of her whim
Blue dress exploding all around her
Hear the galloping of her youth

Hear her song
Of heart so long the sound
Held in dimming light
Covered with a flannel gown
Hung in the sun to flower

She walks where eyes watch
And melts as she passes each whisper
Her colt legs strong in root take note
Of each cracked sidewalk cloaked
With her impatience

She is falling in love with a love song
That plays her each night in dim
Her skin like angel dust when touched
Leaves a pattern laced with trust

See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song



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Startime
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1 posted 2002-03-06 12:20 PM


BRAVO!!!!!This poem is absolutely wonderful...Her Song sings a different tune but still is filled with all the feelings that fill her heart...BRAVO!!! I love it...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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2 posted 2002-03-06 12:27 PM


See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song
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Ah Martie....you continue to leave me breathless after each post that I read.  Thank you for this one....Her Song....yes!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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3 posted 2002-03-06 12:28 PM


I think I'm seeing a lot of pieces of my dear friend, Martie.   And no more falling! LOL!  This is pretty and I enjoyed much. *hugs*

Michael

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There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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4 posted 2002-03-06 12:28 PM



Thank you for writing this just for me....I promise to share it well....

This, my dear, is more than a Keeper...it's a treasurer....

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5 posted 2002-03-06 01:15 PM


Martie yes this is a treasure, and I printed this one out and will frame this as "your" contribution to my wall of poetry friends.  I think I happen to like this the best of all that you have ever done, as the visions it created were so vivid in my mind (but still like that curtain flapping in the breeze, you know - they way you said it)

~* Without deep reflection one knows from daily life that one exists for other people ." *~

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6 posted 2002-03-06 01:16 PM


She is falling in love with a love song
That plays her each night in dim
Her skin like angel dust when touched
Leaves a pattern laced with trust

See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song

You dear lady are a treasure... and your words..touching truths we can ponder... loved this...

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7 posted 2002-03-06 01:30 PM


that is the part I liked too


"
She is falling in love with a love song
That plays her each night in dim
Her skin like angel dust when touched
Leaves a pattern laced with trust

See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song"


this is fantastic imagery and emotion

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8 posted 2002-03-06 01:47 PM


Love this Martie!! Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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9 posted 2002-03-06 01:50 PM


Martie~
Your heart ... your heart ...
in each piece of poetry I hear your heart songs~

This is so touching~
So real ... so you~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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10 posted 2002-03-06 03:15 PM


Blue dress exploding all around her
Hear the galloping of her youth

See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song

I would have loved this poem simply for the phrase "See this woman strong with fragile"... but the whole is so amazing. *S* Every time I think I've read your best, you up the ante'. *S* Beautiful!

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11 posted 2002-03-06 03:20 PM


Martie, I could see her in that dress, this is wonderful.floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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12 posted 2002-03-06 04:45 PM


"See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song"




(BIG HUGGGSSSSSSS) God Bless You, sweet friend, I couldn't help but cry reading your gorgeous emssage of faith and optimism, I only wish the whole world can think and feel this way and forever follow their dreams down the path less travelled and let the songbirds join their heartbeats in melody of love! (kiss on cheek) You are a true angel, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet artie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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13 posted 2002-03-06 11:19 PM


See that girl all blush and thin
See the sky that dangles
At the edge of her whim

Blue dress exploding all around her
Hear the galloping of her youth
========================================

only you can come up with these awesome images and phrases...
this is one of the most delightful poems I've read in a long time...sheer poetry just for the sake of poetry.
what an awesome muse you have my girlie

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14 posted 2002-03-06 11:22 PM


Martie...I agree with Startime.  BRAVO!!!! This is a rare gem.  Beautiful beyond words, priceless.  ***Ivy Rose
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15 posted 2002-03-06 11:58 PM



Martie, this is wonderful, creative, moving writing!
As always, I enjoy your style~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Tim
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16 posted 2002-03-07 12:01 PM


The pinnacle of Martiesque... a pure treasure to read and experience.  
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17 posted 2002-03-07 12:30 PM


A few faves:

"Blue dress exploding all around her"

"Her skin like angel dust when touched
Leaves a pattern laced with trust"

"See this woman strong with fragile...
Dusted off from many falls"

Thank you for the musing this invites. Delightful, warm, playful... kinda spunky, too ... and hope, a bright hope... ~smiles~ I like this one, Martie. ~m

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18 posted 2002-03-07 05:41 AM


Love it...fresh, invigorating etc...from one air-poet to another...

K

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19 posted 2002-03-07 08:29 AM


Again you have impressed me with yor talents.. again I enjoy the way the story unfolds..to a conclusion we can ponder all in our own way...


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20 posted 2005-01-13 12:42 PM


It's good to see a stone in its original setting....helps you appreciate the new, and understand that the value in it isn't based on anything temporal at all.

This that you truly speak of here...I've seen it many times, for many many years...as you know. It's as beautiful now as ever.

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