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SEA
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0 posted 2002-03-05 11:14 AM




Void of sensation
I feel all that you are
No distance between us
You remain too far
Elusive emotion
Rooted in my soul
Fragments of forever
Will never make me whole
Screaming in the silence
My whispers, will you hear?
If I make no sense
Can you comprehend my fear?
In the nothingness I hide
With my heart so exposed
All this love for you
Remains undisclosed……


~SEA~



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1 posted 2002-03-05 11:18 AM


what more to lose
than love
then to offer it
boldly

enjoyed the images SEA

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2 posted 2002-03-05 11:19 AM



Ah, the masque of pretend...well done, SEA...lately you seem to be venting, then re-charging...all of which allows us to grow...

Be well, my little one...

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3 posted 2002-03-05 11:20 AM


I feel all that you are
No distance between us
You remain too far
Elusive emotion
Rooted in my soul
Fragments of forever
Will never make me whole
================================

*sigh*
tis not easy being a moth....
aching write...or I should say purge...
love the pic and the title.

So it seems your saving grace was only saving face,
you thought he was wanting you...
but he was only wanting you to let him off the hook.

~BNL~

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4 posted 2002-03-05 11:38 AM


If I make no sense
Can you comprehend my fear?

Not sure why but these lines stood out for me.  Undisclosed love...is there anything more maddening?
Still, your heart sings.
Cowboy

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5 posted 2002-03-05 11:40 AM


well done SEA.... an expression many can relate to and take from...


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6 posted 2002-03-05 11:50 AM


beautiful the metaphors..the mask.....we all wear one.  Wonderful Susan

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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7 posted 2002-03-05 12:05 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautifully bittersweet, sweet Susan, my heart goes out to all true lovers whose love is hidden and stuggles to be exposed and I pray with all my heart that true love will be unmasked for all to share true happiness with! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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Deep in the heart
8 posted 2002-03-05 12:26 PM


how could I not hear
my heart is in tune with yours
across this black void

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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9 posted 2002-03-05 01:04 PM


This is so beautifully penned, Sue

Fragments of forever
Will never make me whole

What gorgeous words.  

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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10 posted 2002-03-05 01:07 PM


**nods**
Yep..
lol.
thats all I can say besides...
enjoyed very much..

How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

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11 posted 2002-03-05 02:00 PM


Your poem gave me pause....as i wondered, how many of us 'settle' for
something, knowing there is a bright and wonderful Loving relationship
out there.   Do we know of it, and just can't admit it?  

stunning this, Sea, ......(ps....got any medicine for being 'un-stunned?  *smiles*)
tSR

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12 posted 2002-03-05 02:03 PM


Sometimes it's best not to disclose, for in doing so we are often disappointed by the results we obtain.  Nice work, Susan.   (((hugs)))

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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13 posted 2002-03-05 02:08 PM


Wonderful Sue!  Enjoyed this piece as I do all that you write and the pic is perfect!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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14 posted 2002-03-05 07:26 PM


SEA~

She *sighs* SEA~ *sighs*~

Hauntingly beautiful~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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15 posted 2002-03-05 08:01 PM


Sue,  as usual...you write another masterpiece for us all to enjoy...
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16 posted 2002-03-05 08:24 PM


Beautifully penned, I love this much sea and the picture adds to it with the masks.

"My whispers, will you hear?
If I make no sense
Can you comprehend my fear?"

Lovely. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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17 posted 2002-03-05 08:45 PM


Circe darling girl this is exceptionally good writing, the images that you’ve painted in this are utterly utterly outstanding, the ache, the souls sad sigh. Oh I remember this and how well you’ve written it. You really can write wonderfully well. This truly paints a sadly beautiful picture YOU are indeed a master of art here

Seriously good writing darling girl, very very good



Love and warm stuff
As always
Slushy


To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


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18 posted 2002-03-05 09:12 PM


achingly wanting, Sea...loved the "feel" through this.


jwesley

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19 posted 2002-03-05 10:01 PM


How beautifully you pen these feelings. You brought back memories of them to me. There are few things that ache more, than loving someone, and not being able to have them, or tell them for one reason or another. You describe the ache very well.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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20 posted 2002-03-10 05:44 PM


~~sighing~~ I can feel the frustration of reaching out for that golden ring, only to go around again and again in the effort. It can be so heart wrenching...so close, yet so far from realizing lifelong dreams. Don't give up, patience and preserverance wins the race.
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21 posted 2002-03-10 10:36 PM


screaming silent whispers.....oh, but I know how this feels, and you put it into words for me!!  Thank you for this one.......

The road goes on forever, and the stories never end!
  
    


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22 posted 2002-03-10 11:09 PM


thank you all very much, I'm sorry for those that can relate *hugs* to you all
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23 posted 2002-03-11 12:01 PM


SEA,  This is Great!!!   I love it
  Connie

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24 posted 2002-03-11 04:20 PM


Susan,

     How did I miss this one???  I'm glad I found it. I enjoyed.

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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