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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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 Void of sensation I feel all that you are No distance between us You remain too far Elusive emotion Rooted in my soul Fragments of forever Will never make me whole Screaming in the silence My whispers, will you hear? If I make no sense Can you comprehend my fear? In the nothingness I hide With my heart so exposed All this love for you Remains undisclosed…… ~SEA~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
what more to lose than love then to offer it boldly enjoyed the images SEA |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ah, the masque of pretend...well done, SEA...lately you seem to be venting, then re-charging...all of which allows us to grow... Be well, my little one... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I feel all that you are No distance between us You remain too far Elusive emotion Rooted in my soul Fragments of forever Will never make me whole ================================ *sigh* tis not easy being a moth.... aching write...or I should say purge... love the pic and the title. So it seems your saving grace was only saving face, |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
If I make no sense Can you comprehend my fear? Not sure why but these lines stood out for me. Undisclosed love...is there anything more maddening? Still, your heart sings. Cowboy |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well done SEA.... an expression many can relate to and take from... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
beautiful the metaphors..the mask.....we all wear one. Wonderful Susan On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautifully bittersweet, sweet Susan, my heart goes out to all true lovers whose love is hidden and stuggles to be exposed and I pray with all my heart that true love will be unmasked for all to share true happiness with! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
how could I not hear my heart is in tune with yours across this black void Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is so beautifully penned, Sue Fragments of forever Will never make me whole What gorgeous words.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
**nods** Yep.. lol. thats all I can say besides... enjoyed very much.. How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so. |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Your poem gave me pause....as i wondered, how many of us 'settle' for something, knowing there is a bright and wonderful Loving relationship out there. Do we know of it, and just can't admit it? stunning this, Sea, ......(ps....got any medicine for being 'un-stunned? *smiles*) tSR |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sometimes it's best not to disclose, for in doing so we are often disappointed by the results we obtain. Nice work, Susan. (((hugs)))Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Sue! Enjoyed this piece as I do all that you write and the pic is perfect! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ She *sighs* SEA~ *sighs*~ Hauntingly beautiful~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sue, as usual...you write another masterpiece for us all to enjoy... |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Beautifully penned, I love this much sea and the picture adds to it with the masks. "My whispers, will you hear? If I make no sense Can you comprehend my fear?" Lovely. floria Floria |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Circe darling girl this is exceptionally good writing, the images that you’ve painted in this are utterly utterly outstanding, the ache, the souls sad sigh. Oh I remember this and how well you’ve written it. You really can write wonderfully well. This truly paints a sadly beautiful picture YOU are indeed a master of art here Seriously good writing darling girl, very very good   Love and warm stuff As always Slushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
achingly wanting, Sea...loved the "feel" through this. jwesley |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
How beautifully you pen these feelings. You brought back memories of them to me. There are few things that ache more, than loving someone, and not being able to have them, or tell them for one reason or another. You describe the ache very well. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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PearlsB4Swine Member
since 2002-02-01
Posts 130where the heart finds me |
~~sighing~~ I can feel the frustration of reaching out for that golden ring, only to go around again and again in the effort. It can be so heart wrenching...so close, yet so far from realizing lifelong dreams. Don't give up, patience and preserverance wins the race. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
screaming silent whispers.....oh, but I know how this feels, and you put it into words for me!! Thank you for this one....... The road goes on forever, and the stories never end! |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you all very much, I'm sorry for those that can relate *hugs* to you all |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
SEA, This is Great!!! I love it Connie |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Susan,  How did I miss this one??? I'm glad I found it. I enjoyed.Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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