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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2002-02-28 05:24 AM

you were sleepy eye
sticky inside too
you said
the night was tired
so you didn't
but the morning was
different
and you said you missed me
after
when he went to work
and you had time
in the shower
to show me
what you made
while you were in love
without me

you spoke of small talk things
I enjoyed that woman
that was barefoot
and open legged
with her heart
just being a woman
not putting on things
to impress me
but maybe taking off things
to impress me
and holding herself
to the light
for me to taste
with my eyes
what she knew I missed
like dry mouth water

tomorrow is not our money
it is spent by someone else
somewhere else
on another set of dreams
but I still dream in my projections
that we might steal a piece of it
just a moment
to say hello
and
yes I miss you
before I feel you distant
walking
away to other eyes
when I become again
your yesterday ocean
and I whisper with my wind
to the back of your sails

©Dark

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2002-02-28 06:25 AM

sensual and beautiful in the end, D.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2002-02-28 07:19 AM

thank you nt for your soft smiles
and eyes...

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2002-02-28 09:13 AM

would you look at me?! I'm a puddle sitting at the computer trying to have coffee.....

this is wonderful writing....

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2002-02-28 12:38 PM

tomorrow is not our money
it is spent by someone else
somewhere else
on another set of dreams
but I still dream in my projections
that we might steal a piece of it
just a moment
to say hello
and
yes I miss you

I like to think the walk is
worth going the extra mile.

Enjoyed your soft words DS~

Indigo
Senior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

5 posted 2002-02-28 02:12 PM

when I become again
your yesterday ocean
and I whisper with my wind
to the back of your sails

to travel on seas of love
bathed in the mist
of storms
tossed by the winds
of change
charged with the electricity
of desire
scouring the horizon
for north star's unwavering
presence
to guide me home.

The last stanza of your poem is amazing...
How many times can I say that about your work, DS? *s* Endlessly.

Indigo

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2002-02-28 02:19 PM

Excellent writing..and a soft sensual way with the words I envy... I have become a fan from the small sampling of works I have read...and this one only reminds me why..

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

7 posted 2002-02-28 02:20 PM

you spoke of small talk things
I enjoyed that woman
that was barefoot
and open legged
with her heart
just being a woman

Precious..times..that many take for granted.

when I become again
your yesterday ocean

that image floats hope, warmly, sensually.

Sincerely,
Regina

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2002-02-28 02:33 PM

DS

Again you capture me in a sigh
with your words

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

9 posted 2002-03-01 06:59 AM

Thank you all so much for the review...

SEA, coffee makes puddles?

Lori, tomorrows are our treasures
that we seldom can touch

Indigo, you bless me with those
head shakes and nods,

Cpat, I am a fan of your replies thank you

Rwood, soft woman words in return
for humble dreams, thank you

Martie, I dream of your sighs when I read
the replies

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

10 posted 2002-03-01 08:37 AM

DarkStranger~
Tenderly tendered pieces of your heart~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

11 posted 2002-03-01 11:06 PM

yes I miss you
before I feel you distant
walking
away to other eyes

Lauren~

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

Lia Fail
Member

since 2002-02-26

Posts 80

12 posted 2002-03-02 12:22 PM

This is outstanding! I wish I could write in this form.
Lia

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

13 posted 2002-03-02 01:06 AM

and you had time
in the shower
to show me
what you made
while you were in love
without me
================================
and holding herself
to the light
for me to taste
with my eyes
what she knew I missed
like dry mouth water
=================================
yes I miss you
before I feel you distant
walking
away to other eyes
when I become again
your yesterday ocean
and I whisper with my wind
to the back of your sails
==================================

oh man... whew!!
good grief...I said one more poem before I go to bed...but now...I dont think I'll be sleeping much...lol
very very cool write poet sir....most impressive style.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

14 posted 2002-03-04 07:48 AM

Marge, thank you so much

Lauren, I miss your eyes
when you look out the window
for just a moment thank you

Lia, humble thanks to you

Janet Marie...I sure enjoy when you walk by and sit for a few word moments...thank you

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