Open Poetry #19 |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
in the inner stillness somewhere just out of reach I felt your footsteps fall upon my beach music played the tune the night sang off key wind sighed….softly cried touched the heart of me memories were stirred dancing with tomorrow’s history unable to change the fact you remain a part of me echoes whispered back and forth from heart back out to sea endlessly repeating this haunting melody ~SEA~ |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
memories were stirred dancing with tomorrow’s history unable to change the fact you remain a part of me I feel this way about the ocean. Wonderful write SEA~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Soooooooo hauntingly beautiful, sweet friend, may you forever hold many precious memories close to your heart and may they forever bring smiles to your heart forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is another timeless beauty! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sea, Excellent write. Beautifully done. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA, the staccato sound I heard in the read of this lent itself to a heartbeat...did you know that? It does... and it's a Keeper... |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
damn girl !!!... (can i say that?)....giggle...this is excellent...helen |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sea "in the inner stillness somewhere just out of reach I felt your footsteps fall upon my beach" The lovely sigh in this one I understand. Beautiful! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I'm keeping this, it's mine. Everyone, get keep your hands off. LOL Your writing to truly wonderful, Susan (((hugs))) Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah yes..those things that remain a part of us... very nicely done Sea... nicely done indeed. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Sue! This is truly beautiful! I do agree with Karilea...it does have the sound, beat and feel of a heart beat. Wonderful! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Circe darling girl Oh my stars this is utterly utterly wonderful really lovely writing, YOU have brought such a smile of remembrance to me face and I do love to smile you know. Not all memories are bad, and the good ones I keep. The bad ones I let fade away like sea foam, insubstantial for they have nothing to keep them alive. I love the flow of this it’s soooooooo smooth, abide awhile with your butterfly This is wonderful YOU are such a wonderful writer Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
"memories were stirred dancing with tomorrow’s history" such beautiful lines in here Sea. I love this, floria Floria |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I walked on your beach you have trod upon my heart now we walk alone Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
echoes whispered back and forth from heart back out to sea This is a simply beatiful read. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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butterflykiss989 Member
since 2002-02-19
Posts 52 |
Well I dont know what else I can say everyone has seemed to expess the same setiments I would... beautiful. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You do love the beach...as you once said... and your poetry reflects it...NICE, Sue... |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
This touched me.. It held many different levels of meaning and I think I would have to read it many more times to feel and savor each and every one. Wonderful.. this one goes to favorites. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love this one! |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Susan, There is nothing I can say that I haven't said before. This is wonderful I enjoyed as always. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Susan, as one who walks the Shores of Alone, I am feelng myself right in the heart of this poem. It is a beautiful thing, when someone's writing can lead you right into the place you love the most. Thanks for all your kindness recently, too. Sandra |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you all very much., Sandra....I know what you are feeling in a universal loss of one you love sort of way, and while your hurt is unique, it's shared with those who care about you. thank you, I am pleased you liked this one |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A mellifluent melody indeed.. This is lovely, Sea.. |
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Lia Fail Member
since 2002-02-26
Posts 80 |
Sea... speechless...no words."OUTSTANDING." Standing Ovation!!!! Lia |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
echoes whispered back and forth from heart back out to sea endlessly repeating this haunting melody SEA~ Do you know how much I adore your poetry? Your words speak so clearly and are always so relevant to me. Must be something about the page we're on. Lovely lovely~ |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Sue, this really touches my heart. I didn't feel the link to the sea as much as the memories that won't fade. Your words are wonderful as usual. Loved it. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
unable to change the fact you remain a part of me echoes whispered back and forth from heart back out to sea endlessly repeating this haunting melody Absolutely beautiful, SEA... the rhythm of the waves is woven into your words... this is one of your best! |
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