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Skyfyre
Senior Member

since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

0 posted 2001-06-12 04:24 AM

The night
crouches, expectant,
pressing impatience against
tenuous glass;
a regard dark and ancient
peers, studying insignificance.
The lamp spreads feeble fingers
against the pane, a surrender
to the beast beyond.

Outside, a rose
trembles on the stalk,
resting her head on the window
in repose, or defeat;
delicate yellow melts to cream-and-shadow,
pleading silently with darkness.

So grave a quiet is
a critical burden, and yet
I shiver when winds move,
bellowing in their borrowed voices --
Noises stolen from crevices,
the sigh-and-whistle of eaves,
perhaps, or the secrets of grass –
murmured protests
of this space shaken from dreams.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 2001-06-12 07:41 AM

Well it's about time you wrote something, dear. I was wondering if you were ever going to pick up the pen again. You have not lost it, either. This is not only an excellent depiction of a scene, it screams with emotion as well. Loved it, love you.

Michael

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

2 posted 2001-06-12 02:41 PM

Must be something in the air... everyone is losing their muse, only to recover with something dark & quiet.

These lines:

pressing impatience against
tenuous glass

Outside, a rose...
...resting her head on the window
in repose, or defeat;
delicate yellow melts to cream-and-shadow

Noises stolen from crevices,
the sigh-and-whistle of eaves,
perhaps, or the secrets of grass –
murmured protests
of this space shaken from dreams.

God, striking, makes me jealous to the teeth lol...

As a whole, makes me think that something is stirring in you, but refuses to come out... so you have to let cunning descriptions and quiet reverberations of something powerful between lines substitute for the blank absolute of passion. But maybe that's just me. More on this when I get the chance to chat with you later...

Both of you: CALL US. We need to go camping.

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (edited 06-12-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-12 03:51 PM

I enjoyed this one. Very well done here!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-06-12 11:39 PM

The night
crouches, expectant,
pressing impatience against
tenuous glass;
a regard dark and ancient
peers, studying insignificance.
========================
Outside, a rose
trembles on the stalk,
resting her head on the window
in repose, or defeat;
delicate yellow melts to cream-and-shadow,
pleading silently with darkness.

So grave a quiet is
a critical burden, and yet
I shiver when winds move,
===============================

I heard a rumor that one of my fav poets...
(and her cute boyfriend who can write good too)*wink* ROFL...
had posted over here...
my oh my, how I have missed your words Lady POE-tess.
And this was a perfect reminder of whats been missed...
those hauntingly beautiful images you do so well..which dress up the emotions you express with such intensity and your classic poectic phrasing and vocabulary.
this is excellent Linda...and its so great to get to read you.
take care
jm

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

5 posted 2001-06-13 02:06 PM

Ah...it's always a pleasure to read your work Linda. You are one of my favorites you know. This is so gently flowing it should only be read in a whisper!

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

6 posted 2001-06-15 02:05 PM

So grave a quiet is
a critical burden, and yet
I shiver when winds move,
bellowing in their borrowed voices --
Noises stolen from crevices,
the sigh-and-whistle of eaves,
perhaps, or the secrets of grass –
murmured protests
of this space shaken from dreams.

a very haunting poem, one for the library.
excellent write

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-06-16 07:31 PM

Very nicely done. I liked this a LOT. Awesome work.

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection. Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2001-06-18 03:44 PM

How well you painted dread, Linda! The feeling I got from this reminded me of a theme from "The World According To Garp"--'The Presence Of the Undertoad"--a chilling portrayal that reminded me a bit of an anxiety attack--and I'll shaddup before someone calls dem guys in the white coats--but I enjoyed this--wish you'd write more!!!

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-06-23 06:16 PM

ah, I've missed this kind of writing from you. . . you do it so well. . . you know, you were one of the first here whose work that I always read again and again, and it's my pleasure to do so once more. . .

there's always so much that I can see in what you write, this is no exception. . . it's multi-layered, and I'm sure that if I come back tomorrow and read it, I'll find something else. . .

wonderful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

10 posted 2001-06-23 06:25 PM

Linda, you write of a haunting moment so intricately and uniquely...I am speechless, there's just such an awesome depth of emotion here. I have read this several times, and each time I am even more blown away, I must save this for my library~

Take care,
Melissa~

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

11 posted 2001-06-23 10:13 PM

This is brilliantly beautiful
Sandra

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