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Member Rara Avis
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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2001-02-12 03:26 AM

Amy’s Hair & Other Tales
©2001 Christopher Ward

I pause,
     a step away from chase;
  lean on a doorframe
-wood rust and gray -
      heave a sorrowed sigh.

and in the wake of exhaled breath,
      Amy’s brunette ponytail bounces to the tune
            of her angry gait.
     crashing heel to asphalt
  slide over to cobalt blue,
       the Malibu she calls “Mandy.”

those chestnut tresses swing,
   dance about her face as she plies the door open…
       hinges worn, squeaky and rough.
  strands caught at the gentle press of flesh
         where lips transform from a kiss,
              to peach traveling down her chin.

     glaciers stab through fluorescent green
   while spiked fingernails picked
      by-one at damp curls floating lightly
             in the summer night’s wash.

       shiver in the warm night.

    I’ve never been able to stand straight
          in the face of that glare.
            icy chill,
      it stabs through flesh and will;

     she always forms me undone.

    legs turn protoplasmic,
and it’ll be days,
     maybe more,
   before she comes back to rebuild my spine,
free me from the jellyfish depression which follows
        every time she shoots black hate,
   without mercy,
from “Mandy’s” three-inch exhaust.

    smooth tires
deposit patches of non-degradable rubber,
  marking innocent asphalt
         (see the similarities here?),
   I feel the black ocean crawl onto my back
    groans press into burbling protestations.

  give in,
shuffling finned feet
   across the beaten threshold of my prison.
     walls scream aquamarine,
  but I don’t see.
     the floor whispers bright white sand,
but I don’t feel.
  the world beckons life and light,
       but bones crumble
              beneath the weight of angst and self-pity.

the door slams,
a wash of hopelessness crushes me to my knees.
     shamble, ramble, stutter,
        slide across the splintered wooden floor,
      drag despair inch-by-inch,
            sob by heart-rending sob.

the door?
  open, a rush of air, breath and,
she returns, mermaid breasted and hair bound.
   she takes my hand.
  I stand, spined again I walk.
   her eyes pierce mine and comments,
     “I was only going to the store.”

I pause,
     a step away from chaos;
  lean on a doorframe
-wood rust and gray -
      heave a happy sigh.

Everyone has the right to be stupid. Some people abuse the priveledge.
-Joseph Stalin

To seek our potential by visiting change is the path of true greatness.
-Author Unknown

[This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 02-12-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2001-02-12 03:42 AM


Nice write through anxiety's pen. Can't say I understand all the references...but then? I NEVER could say that...sigh...but the feeling translates and I felt the worry...and as always, you made me think.

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
2 posted 2001-02-12 10:12 AM

Bravo! A chuckle here and there, serious feeling of sadness, then that relief at the end.

Chris your writing amazes me! You really gave an image to bring the reader into it, with your wise imagery.  

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Posts 4094
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3 posted 2001-02-12 12:36 PM Resident Passionate Miscreant, you!!!!  Had me going on a very intense emotional ride with such tangible adjectiles and scintillating imagery, only to be buried beneath a canine's co-dependency wrapped in sardonic humor. You cad!!!!

I feel so uuuuuuused.

Ah I feel a crooning moment coming on....'And they call it puppy looooooaaaaooooovaaaaoooooooooveeeee....'

Heh...truly, Chris, I enjoyed this one just have a miscreantal way about ya.

Alicat, the Persnikitty

[This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 02-12-2001).]

Irish Rose
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4 posted 2001-02-12 04:18 PM

This is a fine piece of writing, young man  

"I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis

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Member Patricius
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5 posted 2001-02-12 06:02 PM

Nicely done here.....
It give me the Ooo's, and yes....even the Aaa's...

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
6 posted 2001-02-13 12:06 PM

Awesome of you to grace us with such an
"on the edge of my seat" piece.
I felt as though I were going to explode from anxiety,
then,..... a HUGE sigh of relief at the end!
Not to mentions, the images that you sketched should be framed
with excellence!
Superior job! :D
And again, nice to see you.


"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"

Member Rara Avis
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Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
7 posted 2001-02-15 01:51 PM

Hey - thanks y'all for your time to comment on this! I had fun going outside myself (I'm usually so self-centered that I can't write poetry about anything but direct life experiences!) and presenting a little twist at the end. Ali, you nailed it exactly, bringing up words I'd not thought to associate (canine co-dependancy) even though it fit exactly what I was trying to portray!



Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
8 posted 2001-03-13 02:29 AM

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9 posted 2001-03-13 04:36 AM

This is a compelling piece.
Perhaps you should go outside more often.
Great admiration from this poetic corner.

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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10 posted 2001-03-13 11:30 AM

Christopher--This is excellent writing...totally captivating!
brian madden
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11 posted 2001-06-02 04:10 PM

Chris, my I am impressed. Some interesting and well formed images here. Got to say I liked it a lot.

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

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12 posted 2001-06-16 07:17 PM

This is an awesome piece.  very impressive... I loved the style.  Perfectly done.  Thanks for the read.


"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

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13 posted 2001-06-17 07:19 PM

Another wonderful piece from you, my friend. I, too, was surprised by the ending, but that helps give it its charm.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Yu Lan
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14 posted 2001-07-09 09:54 PM

well done, Chris! This is so neat! I'm going to add this to my library, 'coz i can't stop smiling.. I'm not quite sure what it is that u've done with this, you've kind of implied everything, and not told us anything.. and that's good poetry..   one effect I've been trying for for ages, and haven't quite 'got' yet.. nope, i definitely admire this piece..  
Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
15 posted 2001-07-09 09:55 PM

woops, posted twice..  

“One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..”

[This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 07-09-2001).]

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