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quietlydying
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the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2004-05-24 04:31 PM


It's no wonder
these
tremors and
miseries persist
in the most
tormenting of ways.
Granulated sugar
wearing away/grinding down
what's left of
your sanity.

Have a stranger live
your fantasy and
then toss you the
inked remains
from over their
envied shoulder.

To dream is to die.

/jeni/



'Christianity is the complete negation of common sense and sound reason.'
-- Mikhail Bakunin

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (05-24-2004 05:19 PM).]

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2004-05-24 04:49 PM


Not long ago I was wondering where you had dissappeared to, it nice to see you here and a pleasure to read you again.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
2 posted 2004-05-24 05:34 PM


Have a stranger live
your fantasy and
then toss you the
inked remains
from over their
envied shoulder.


wonderful writing...

M

Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2004-05-24 08:16 PM


Please toss more thoughts this way, more often. I personally have felt like tossing most of my writes into the recycle bin lately. LOL.

gemjop
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Pencilveinia, USA
4 posted 2004-06-01 08:52 AM


Have a stranger live
your fantasy and
then toss you the
inked remains
from over their
envied shoulder.

One of the most outstanding lines I've read in a long time.

Marshalzu
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Lurking
5 posted 2004-06-01 09:00 AM


Wonderful writing
fractal007
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6 posted 2004-06-06 06:21 PM


I especially enjoyed the last line of this one.  Good write all round.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
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