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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2003-08-19 10:43 PM

Any definition would be incorrect.

She can’t fly without her friends
needs support to launch her soul
fifty-five feet in the air to escape
the constant fears ringing
in her bell tower brain.

Who am I smiling for?

The words on the refrigerator
are simply your way of challenging
her brain from time to time.

His hands are my own.

I saw them, I remember them.
I looked upon his face and it was mine,
but different, some how.

Every wrinkle is there,
hiding a memory telling her that
everyone feels this way sometimes
but it’s not the same.

Identically.... different.

He is me and I am him
though our paths have yet
to cross every feeling is alike.

What is it like to look into the face
of a stranger and see yourself?

Difference is indifferent
to the opinion of right and wrong.
And up and down are
left and right when you have to
hang by your toes to see.

When I die not a trace of me
shall remain imbedded in this world.

Instead she will gather up all of her dreams
and sow them into her heart,
traces of stitches remaning long after
the memories have faded away.

You made your mark on me.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2003-08-24 07:22 AM

Instead she will gather up all of her dreams
and sow them into her heart,
traces of stitches remaning long after
the memories have faded away.

You made your mark on me.
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That ending is perfect poetic impact.
Great use of theme throught out this..
a bittersweet beauty..
well done poetess Allysa!

You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ...
and know my love and my desperation were one and the same.

J.Browne

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2003-08-24 11:21 AM

"Identically different..." - I enjoyed the dichotomy of directions you took this piece, Allysa...

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

3 posted 2003-08-26 12:17 PM

I love the part about studying hands. In fact, that could be the title of this poem.

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

4 posted 2003-08-28 10:31 PM

thank you all for your kind replies..

I have to agree with you, bsquirrel.. but sadly, it's a 24hr time frame edity thing...

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