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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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She floats at inhale. She breaks at exhale. She burns of wet timber. She flickers. She glows. She wisps of a fire. She cradles sharp petals. She swoons in a flame. She flares to a star. She births one another. She watches the water. She tumbles the surface. She scars in her smoke. She trembles the edges. She floats of white ashes. She falls softly silts. She lessens to drops. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She floats at inhale. She breaks at exhale. She burns of wet timber. She flickers. She glows. She wisps of a fire. She cradles sharp petals. She swoons in a flame. She flares to a star. She births one another. She watches the water. She tumbles the surface. She scars in her smoke. She trembles the edges. She floats of white ashes. She falls softly silts. She lessens to drops ======================== OMG!!!!!!!!!! YOU ARE SOOOOOOO COOOOL!!! I cant pick lines out...they all belong together...each a poetic entity of their own....in imagery, metaphor and personifi...but laced all together with your gift of assonance and you have penned a MOTH ANTHEM!!! I LOVE THIS POEM. She scars in her smoke. She trembles the edges. She floats of white ashes. She falls softly silts. *moth happy dance*  you just blow me away sometimes... I do so adore your poetic mind  "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." LH [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (08-08-2003 03:07 PM).] |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is just absolutely brilliant, I have read it a couple of times and I just absolutely love it. Thanks for sharing this wonderful writing with us  Andy |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
something in the way..what a gift [This message has been edited by Aenimal (08-08-2003 07:06 PM).] |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
this is what it's like to read poetry at it's best. this one for the library insanity is not a crime |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
smilin huge here this is pure Mike Magic awesome |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yep |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
She reads. She weeps. She sighs. She smiles... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks. Someone very close to me started smoking, and it's taken me a while to come to grips with it. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Ahh your reply... I was thinking this was either a smoker or a cigarette. It could very well be both, knowing you and your crazy boundless self-standard of poetry. I like the style and the flow of it, I would have liked a bit more meter but that's probably just my problem. The ending was clever and a very unique image, which I'm used to getting from you. Really nice work, this one... Parasite Faith is a fine invention |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, LP. I think it feels incomplete, but that's the point of this one. (hence the title) |
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