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a visual presentation...lol |
Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
Heart Shot mama whore baby slut once upon smiling an innocent smile to match smiling words clever reassurance. Spoke of promise neverending sacredness true,true tis love really love. Along comes a slipperly evil sucubus , a carhop whore, evil slut whispering sweet til it gets what it wants... all the cash hidden in ones heart... then spits you out... next !... waiting in line; always the fool chasing, slave to putrid instant gratification... What can one do when finally finding and it bites them sucks them dry of tears voice horse from screaming into the merciless uncaring night “WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO ME” mama whore baby slut once upon you darkling you heart shot never healing. ~~~~~~~~ [This message has been edited by Tramp Poet (08-02-2003 12:54 PM).] |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Dark reading but I do like the presentation but you will have to enlighten me on just what it is that I'm looking at, great reading though, thanks for sharing it with us Andy |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I'm also unsure what the presentation is supposed to represent. It's obviously a distinct shape of some sort but it's difficult to determine what it's meant to be. I think the presentation forced you into some nice word choices. Neat how formatting can do that for poetry sometimes... enjoyed reading this, Tramp... share with us some more. Parasite Faith is a fine invention |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
To me it appears to be a multisemetrical person, or a christmas tree ornament. I never was very good with these guessing games.. This honestly reminds me of something a freind of mine might whisper in there sleep, which amazes me because you seem to have captured everything in its intirety. Nice. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
My interpretation at least of the shape of the writing is two arrows. One up, one down, squeezing a heart of all emotion. Since I know where this is borne I shall say no more other than I cry with you Dan. Love and Hugz, Your Sister, Shawna |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
obviously...as with all poetry it is entirely up to one's own interpetation... isn't that the jewell of poetry...the ability to make it unique and personal? anyhoo...yes dear sister as usual you know me! the representation is of past and present with both arrows shot into the center of one's heart. lol perhaps a bit too oblique? thanks to y'all for the input...appreciated! |
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