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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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There's something evil in me, seething, it prays you'll find no thing as easy as all the days we passed carefree I hope you gave it all to me no thing leftover to reheat I hope you crave me - hunger - sweet-- and every hour hear my plea a graveled heart beneath my knees... feel the bite of lover's bleed I wish you well, but pray--you'll need It just might spark humanity a piece of faith - a mustard seed and in the glitter of my tears? I pray you see reflection's fears... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was very good. I liked it serenity!!!! Wonderful poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful piece! I can relate to everything you are saying. I hope that you don't have to give into any of those fears. Thanks for sharing!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You certainly hit home runs.... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'm with Sunshine, you rock girl.  I definitely see what you are saying in this poem, and agree 100%. A critique though, perhaps this poem would have had a better flow if you'd incorporated a bit of meter? Don't stop with these outstanding works.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job on the poem.. i liked it.. thanks for sharing and keep writing  ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I pray you see reflection's fears... powerful writing as always "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Your last line, that is the strength of this poem.. yeah this is good.. very beautiful, your writing often has a haunting quality, you know that.. “One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..” |
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