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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
A Fragile Seed A fragile seed was planted in the garden of my heart, A wall was build around it for I thought that would be smart. The gardener had one quick look and said; "This wall must go, Let sunshine fall upon you and some rain to let you grow." And nurtured by his gentle hands this seed soon grow to be A flower of significance, her name is Love you see. I thank you dearest gardener for keeping out the weed, But most of all I thank you for the planting of this seed. Munda |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
VERY very well done. This poem was simply beautiful!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
This is so perfect! JUST right.. A lot of love poetry turns out soppy and clichéd, but.. I love this Munda.. such a sweet, loveable poem.. “A poem is a tiny piece of the poets soul; on paper.” |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh, well done! Very very well done in fact! Iambic septameter? I'd imagine that would be what this is called but I've never used the term before... It reminded me of the old-fashioned "8-6-8-6" syllable formats. Did you think of breaking it into lines of 8 and 6 syllables, and seeing how it looked? Perhaps it would flow differently as well. I really appreciate the message of this as well... I think you did a marvelous job on this, Munda. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beautiful poem...written so well...thanks for the read...i enjoyed it a lot  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
thank you dearest gardener for keeping out the weed, But most of all I thank you for the planting of this seed. beautiful words munda "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thank you all for your very kind words. Allan, this is called iambic heptameter. Nan introduced me to it during the Ballad Workshop. |
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