|A few simple senryus.
since 2001-01-04Posts 3502
(Thought I'd post in here for a change. I wrote these out of fatigue. I'm too tired to judge their goodness... so I post them here to let you all do the work for me. )
Pressed, a heavy hail
You shall be a monarch then
Should you choose to fail
Weary eyes repent
One day, when you're next to me
Sleep is heaven sent
Spice to salt the wise
One part thyme and two part lies
Sage, and slow demise
|© Copyright 2001 Brian James Lee - All Rights Reserved
since 1999-09-21Posts 28049
Allen--I don't really know much about senryus, but I enjoyed these very much...glad you posted them here.
since 2000-08-30Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
Hey Allan, I liked them a lot but I think the last one was best. Nicely done.
I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.
I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily
since 1999-06-25Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
Allan....thank you for these....
anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23Posts 2979
i liked each and every one of them
death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins
since 2001-03-07Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy
I though since I wrote my first senryu I would check out the master senryuer ( okay so I made that word up so what ) I though they were great Until your next masterpiece
"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."
since 1999-06-07Posts 6871
Maybe fatigue is beneficial to your writing, Allan.
since 2000-04-13Posts 1462
Oooh, I like the last one..
guudonya Allan... They are all not bad.. but the last one is good. Very good.
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