|Forgiving The Rationalization
since 2000-06-01Posts 1958
I saw myself in my mirror
My doctors say it's better
I stare into this brightened future
knowing I lost my right to love
so many years before this time
Grounded by my youthful crime
dying under those above
I stare into my darkened past
I see him stand before me
He says it's better
I want to believe
desire will kill us all
I've opened the wound and
disease is soon to come
2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
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since 2001-11-05Posts 2527
This is powerful and touching, Frac... difficult to interpret, of course, but I think that actually adds a lot to the poem by giving the reader more of an ability to relate to the general sense of self-forgiveness, of looking back on one's own past self and trying to see if it's "getting better" or not.
It's sad that you're pessimistic about the future for yourself, Fractal. I'd offer some words of encouragement if I knew exactly what this poem referred to, but I don't. Maybe I'll just talk to you later about it?
I like the style this is written in. It's a good example of the simplicity and bluntness that makes dark poetry so effective, which is exactly why I could never write it myself... the last stanza is perfect and complete, the repeated lines well-selected... overall this is an outstanding poem and deserves more than zero replies.
Glad I took the time to read. Talk to you later, Kev.
Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
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