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washing the feelings away. . . |
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the rain is supposed to wash these feelings away but instead, it's bringing back a flood of memories that are taking me away on a wave of thought there you are again, looking as beautiful as the day I met you the sun shining on your face and the wind in your hair how was I lucky enough to find someone like you? funny, but it seems that whenever it rains, I remember you probably because, for us, the rain was all that we knew it poured over us like the outpouring of our first-loved hearts the rain is supposed to wash these feelings away but instead, it's bringing back a flood of memories that are taking me away on a wave of thought ----------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Last time I tried to wash memories away? I dropped the soap! (YOWSER!) But yes, haunting happen at unexpected times, sometimes. Nicely put, Sir Sven. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem Sven.....I liked how you expressed this one. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
beautiful poem ! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah what triggers a memory....good one sir. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
The rain didn't work for me either. Enjoyed, related. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading this. Nice job --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
serenity, lol. . . thanks for the smile. . . I needed one tonight. . . and yes, they do happen at the strangest times. . . I just wish that I knew why. . . thanks. . . Dopey, thanks. . . glad that you liked. . . helen, thank you. . . deVine, what triggers a memory for me?? Unfortunately, just about everything. . . thank you. . . JLR, I know. . . all it seems to do is make me more depressed. . . *sigh*. . . what if we went out and just ran and played in it?? Marie, thank you for reading. . . glad that I could speak to you. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Some outstanding work here, Sven. I love the whole thing, namely how you began the third stanza with the word "funny" instead of just jumping to the point. It gave an odd feel, that I really appreciated. Did that make sense? hehe Wonderful poetry, my friend, as usual. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Sven, "Oh" those trips into the past this was a wonderful way to express the ride, really enjoyed, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i thinkk serentiy took my words away haunting takes place at most unexpected times... well done, Sir! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Do I know who this speaks of? Yes..I think I do. Those memories come at the most happy times in our lives..and the most sad times in our lives. They seem to make us question everything at that point. I wonder why..when we know we can't ever have it back and possibly wouldn't want it back. *sigh* I can see your sad eyes through this, and all I can offer is a hug. Me You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL |
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