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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2003-04-26 01:52 PM


Determination is Inborn in Me

Determination is a gift for me;
Discipline is inborn in me.
Nothing is too hard I find
When I think of my parents' load.
They have to work, study, and keep the house.
They do all this for me to learn.
I as their daughter shall inherit their gifts
Of determination, will and discipline.
All are inborn in me and all I can have.
Determination is a gift for me;
Discipline is inborn in me.

Determination is a gift for me,
Discipline is inborn in me.
And if I find myself running away,
I will use my discipline and will
To cast the impossible away,
With this song imprinted in my mind,
"I can do it, all are but small tasks."
Determination is a gift for me;
Discipline is inborn in me.

I can do it, all are but small tasks.
I can do it, all are but small tasks.
I can do it, determination is all I need.
And I... I have determination and the will
They are inborn in me from the day I was conceived.
Determination is a gift for me;
Discipline is inborn in me.
Determination is a gift for me;
Discipline is inborn in me.

(c)April 25, 2003
Eliza Simmons

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

© Copyright 2003 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
Local Parasite
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1 posted 2003-04-26 07:02 PM


Is this supposed to be a song, Eliza?  It reads through like one, I mean, with regards to the large amount of repetition... your message is strong but I think you might have gone overboard on the simplicity of the theme.  It seems a bit redundant.

Just my humble opinion... still a very nice poem.  

Parasite

God becomes as
we are that we
may be as he
is
~William Blake

aries_luv_ppl
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since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448
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2 posted 2003-04-26 07:25 PM


yes it is a song. A song of self positive talk or programming. The repetition is made deliberatly to create familiarity, so I can remember.

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

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