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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2003-03-31 12:39 PM

These blinkless eyes,
these hearts of stones
cast into the soil.

Into warm
and dark brown earth.
Will they flutter open?

The sun will cook
their seams to split,
leaving greening shoots.

Rising flutes,
these tendril tongues
dripping with first dew.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-03-31 03:23 PM

There are many seeds I plant so thoughtless I am glad they don't sprout....er? or do they do?

you are on an introspective kick, that I'm enjoying much, m'friend.

Impressed. (just when I thought I couldn't possible think more of you, you do this...and I love ya for it.)

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2003-03-31 04:05 PM

This poem has such vivid and beautiful imagery, it was such a pleasure to read it, thanks for sharing it

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

3 posted 2003-04-01 01:13 PM

Thanks.

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2003-04-01 03:16 PM

Your emphasis on description of your subject's nature reminded me of some of the haiku poetry I used to be into... this is the way that form is supposed to be used. Not to say this should have been a haiku, but I do admire your ability to grasp the real "nature" element like that.

And yes, this did poke a few thoughts into my head. I took it literally, but it still led me into deeper musings... blinkless eyes that sunlight cracks open and lets sprout forth like that.

I admire your ability to keep this so short and give the reader more time to just think about it... I couldn't write so much about a seed in so little space... heh... if I was the one who wrote this poem it'd be a couple pages long...

At any rate... I admire your style, and your brain. No, not the one you're eating... the one you're using.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2003-04-02 04:21 PM

Thanks, Local Parasite. This was just a small little seed of a poem, and I'm glad it grew in your mind.

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

6 posted 2003-04-06 01:14 AM

Beautiful and reflective poem. The wording, particularly at the end, makes for a poem contains pleasing imagery and wonderful sounds.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2003-04-06 10:25 AM

always a fresh and interesting write from you Mike *s
hugss
M

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

8 posted 2003-04-06 05:37 PM

I thank you both, for reading and enjoying this simple little thing.

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