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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain 
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Tiny children scream out Pain engulfs them Wait.... Because that’s what they do They hurt, we take it It’s in their blood Not mine, or yours Theirs.... All colors blend together Like the painting on my wall Now it’s torn Does this remind you? lash out hatred looks upon the faces they are scared you were wrong soon be gone....... hands shake to the moon as the blood pours out and we all survive on one this is who we are..... as meant to be our character white Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... [This message has been edited by Riley (03-02-2003 06:24 PM).] |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This one struck an eerie chord with me. I hope it gets into the book. "If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
I like it.. one comment though, at the end you write "this is who were are..... as ment to be" Is that a typo? meant and we? Just wondering, because if it is, it will go into the book if you don't change it.  -Lynne |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great write thanks for sharing |
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Chloey Member
since 2002-09-29
Posts 74in a silver mustang convertible |
oooh yeah i read this at school! I like it a bunch good luck! you got my vote fo sho'! I write what I feel and I feel what I write. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is some great stuff, Ri... your style is nicely demonstrated here, and your underlying message, well, I'm going to read this through a few more times before coming to a conclusion. I'd rather talk to you about it than influence anyone else's reading with my own interpretation, so I'll just say nicely done. And while I don't think this is your best poem, not by a long shot, I still consider it good enough to appear in Reflections. I'm voting. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Riley, this is very haunting and poignant, sweet friend, I too pray for all these innocent people and that this violence can all just fade away and we cna all survive without anxiety! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Riley, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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