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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
The bright morning sun rises early, her mate our mother world of Pryna lags not far behind, her limb a glint of gold within a cooled sea of darkened blue. The livened rocks of our newly created world embrace the warmth and light of both old globes and work begins anew, the bots churning and harvesting ores and metals fit for use. I feel out of place... Thinker among the workers... But now we all think... One hundred years before this moon was not alone, but held a sister close in hand. They drifted proudly over our complacent heads. How it must have been... To give that awful order... Now Trei drifts alone... "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
OOh eerie... makes me really curious what this is about. One of your sci-fiesque works I take it? I like the idea of a newly created world, and the statement "now we all think." I've pondered on that myself... once we have machines to do all the work for us, what will we be left to do? Nothing but thinking and remembering, or enjoying ourselves. Might make us lazy, or alternately, as you describe, might make us ponderous and reflective. Good use of atmosphere in this poem... the tone was very well set at an early stage and I read this through smoothly and as though spoken. Very cool work. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
"I like the idea of a newly created world, and the statement "now we all think." I've pondered on that myself... once we have machines to do all the work for us, what will we be left to do? Nothing but thinking and remembering, or enjoying ourselves. Might make us lazy, or alternately, as you describe, might make us ponderous and reflective." That's basically it, though with an emphasis on the pondering and reflection. Thanks for the reply. "If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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