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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ok Kari and Ron...you win   Encompassed Destination Somewhere between degrees of latitudes and longitudes lies the distance that now defines, denies, and directs her. White lined lanes and runways wind endlessly into the horizon. Miles of mapped and compassed concrete and clouds. Highways that bend and curve like her need. Roads that rise like the lonely and the ache that drives her. On a day that holds winter too tightly and frigid winds frost her words ... she whispers across the distance calling to the warm sand reverie that holds her heart in tide taken requite. No amount of nights spent in front of the fire will ever season her senses like the sharing of sunrise saturated shorelines sated her. The same degrees of distance that now deny her, will eventually lead her farther on ... Destination: 36° N. Latitude 76° W. Longitude She'll have no need of maps ... her heart knows the way.   Chesapeake Bay 36° N. Latitude 76° W. Longitude "Up where the mountains meet the heavens above Out where the lightning splits the sea I would swear that there's someone ... somewhere watching me Through the wind and the chill and the rain And the storm and the flood I can feel his approach Like a fire in my blood" ~Bonnie Tyler~ ~~~ thank you Capt for the spark and gift of inspiration... /pip/Forum76/HTML/002896.html [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (02-06-2003 03:22 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The alliteration alone speaks volumes... wind that up with a heart on the wind... and you have brilliance... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
no thanks neccessary... the read of it alone enough to satisfy any need. now...go write another.. ( laughing) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet Marie The heart's map is the best kind and the most beauiful.  |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
It doesn't hurt to write... it only hurts when you don't. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
YOU... and your fancy alliterations! Sometimes I forget to remember those things when I'm writing, but they seem like a second nature to you. You always mix your letters around so beautifully, even in looser poetry formats. Your skill with words really makes me jealous, girl. I'm on these really stupid computers at school that won't let me copy/paste, and I'll be damned if I'm copying your poem out word-for-word, so forgive me for not including block quotations in my reply. I'll just give you an overall impression. Gotta say, your introductory stanza is just perfect. It says everything that the poem expands on, all in four well-composed lines. Meets every standard for an introduction, it's almost essay-like. Absolutely splendid. The whole poem dives right into the imagery aspect, you describe every last aspect of the scene to the point where I can picture it myself (without the need of your visual aids... I always read your stuff in the "topic review" window because your pictures are so gosh-darn distracting). Her interaction with the environment just completes the package, bringing the character to the setting, letting the two mingle and dance. I especially like how you wove her actions into the environment, saying the cold winds "frost her words," adds to imagery and tells a story all at the same time. Everything you write, JM... it's like you're right there, talking from all your senses about every thought that enters your mind. I admire your style so much, I was going to post something after reading this, but now I'm reconsidering... think I have to go work on it a bit... Next time you go to Chesapeake, phone me up... I could use some of that inspiration.  Brian "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang! You are amazing! This is amazing... Thank you for this beauty! May we have more please? ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
your heart, will always lead you home.  you know I love this  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Well now, Janet Marie ... how on earth did I get so lucky to find 2 from you today!!! The beauty and inspiration of your latitude and longitude flows all the way out to these coordinates in the chilly north. Lovely visuals, JM ... "No amount of nights spent in front of the fire will ever season her senses like the sunrise saturated shorelines sated her." and I love your closing ... "She'll have no need of maps ... her heart knows the way." No maps required, indeed, when the heart knows the way inherently. Beautifully written, gator gal ... a treasure. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've read this about five times now...and that's just in THIS thread! and Kari and Ron win? no, lady, we ALL win! I still don't know what to say...you bare the soul so beautifully and with such grace that after reading I feel stunned silence. I TRIED to do the scansion but found myself scrolling up and down and sideways smiling. YOU...are so beautiful... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kari....your reply has a brillance all its own..and reads like poetry... thank you for your encouragement( blackmail) to post this LOL thank you for being you. Ron ... tis always a gift when one poets words sparks and stirs anothers muse... when its my moody muse its nothing short of a miracle LOL So YES...thank you is called for.  You and poetess sun are quite the team when it comes to "supporting" (threatening) me to post ROFL thank you poet sir....muchly.Martie... thank you sweets...you know me so well. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Lady... sometimes its heaven and hell....and dont mess with the Sun and the Capt when they ask ya to post...hell hath no fury LOL... thank you poetess of the white.Brian.... you just are too good to me mothy muse...thank you so much..me thinks we have a mutual admiration going on...cuz Im always envious of your writing... thanks for giving me your insight on this...forgive you for no cut and paste? OK...I wont even tell your teach that your cutting class to play in poetry land thanks so much groovy guy. Nancy... MORE? Im still in shock me moody muse gave me 2 in the same month LOL.. thank you so much for your sweet reply poetess enchanting. Sea... yes girlie...I know.. thanks so much...Im loving the inspiration found in the ocean blues.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kit ... well how did I get so lucky to have a smile waiting to happen on both my poems??? LOL .. thank you groovy gator girl. KA....you smiling is whats beautiful...thank you me twin...you make me mothy heart glow with such loving support of my work. love ya thank you all for kind words and support... Thank you again and again to Mark for the gift of the blue waved memories that continue to pull the tides of my pen and my heartstrings.  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'On a day that holds winter too tightly and frigid winds frost her words ... she whispers across the distance calling to the warm sand reverie that holds her heart in tide taken requite.' Hey Jams Great poem. Don't know how I missed it!  (Talk about nagging...) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
me thinks ya just like to wander in late and make a big entrance.  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Absolutely beautiful |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank ya Hoot-girlie...and its absolutely beautiful to see you here. |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
I can't even begin to express how deeply this poem touches me. Love it! Sunkissed. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you so much for stoping by Sunkissed, nice to see you here again. Seems like its been awhile, or maybe I'm out in the blue thanks for letting me know how this touched you. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
So glad I found this. Beautifully written! Just wish I had a tiny bit of your talent for writing. Deb |
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