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light as a stream halving zephyrs, through the bare sheets of our souls |
Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
(if the picture does not immediately appear you can find it here: Autumn Foxfire ) Stephanie exchange was as natural as breathing, catching phrases as easy as dust … no. more. it was as if the words were running ahead of us like impatient children, the conversation literally gaining a life of its own becoming quicker than we could catch it lacing zigzag in invisible silvers the cords threading our chests and guiding, like railroad tracks, the hands of lovers the fluid passage of ideas sprawling everywhere before us, breathing: smoothed out over the grey stroke of the street in a gentle flood and the two of us so slow and smooth just drifting easy talking too loud with hands everywhere gushing free verse poetry and stopping to marvel at street musicians, the natives, light pushing in behind the colors of a tree and making it glow, how tart yet velvet the wine was we strolled over& through folding it with our mouths, the way wine undresses under a tongue falls apart like an orange, in sections and lingers the shape of its body still pressing long after a swallow it seemed i had always known her oh, all of those fluttering rumbling intuitive grips and yet! the joy of discovery, of detail: to marvel as layer by layer was lain in an autumn evening ~ thick as gel as soft as her golden eyes ~ creating dust dirt the walls of canyons collecting little by little aknowing the sweetness and vivacity, the passion her quiet power this gathering of stories, and the rivers that carved them |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you dear...I was gonna be upset if ya didn't "gush" but since you are you and I am me? I do love this, but the other? hmmm...just a matter of taste I suppose, but I preferred the unpolished variation. But you natural enthusiasm still rings true--I just didn't get that "rush" of excitement that made me wanna give ya a valium a couple of hours ago. Pout. *raspberry* Did YOU sleep--at all? |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
well, ill just save the gushes for my friends, thank ye much... (I TOLD you! at least you didnt whap me, COMANCHE rotfl) what is this "sleep" you speak of? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
OK so when am I gonna grow up and be able to write like this? ??????????? Loved both poems here... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Just popped back in to-- |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ron, you'll find that "Megs" is a pedestal below the line of the sea. Swim to find, swim to reach. And drown tryin'. LOL Agharst (she's what whom how inspired my "To a better poet") .m. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is stunning!!! However did you find a graphic to suit so nicely? We can all admire talent and hope to achieve even a smidgen of it... |
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Capricious Member
since 2002-09-14
Posts 89California, USA |
It is my impression that the graphic inspired the words rather than the other way around. I have read quite a few of your poems on file here, madame, and for lack of a better word, I would have to call them organic. Does that make sense to you? I would be interested to see how you would score on the personality test I posted. You write like a hedonist/idealist. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Elizabeth~ Wow! This is just incredible writing! Of course, that's no surprise coming from you. You are extremely talented, and you never cease to amaze and impress. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (10-18-2002 05:10 AM).] |
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