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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2001-12-17 05:25 AM


Two, side-by-side,
the left one, hollow.
Disease 'pon limb--
death sure to follow.

The right one, strong,
Healthy and tall.
Lightning strikes.
The mighty, falls.


(repost from Open....#10 methinks)


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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2001-12-17 12:48 PM


Sometimes you never know what's going to happen...at first I thought this was you and me..and then I realized that one of us would have been struck with lightening and I changed my view quick!!!

I dodge lightening bolts for a living!    

Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-12-17 02:06 PM


I can relate to this for personal reasons, the poem really moved me.

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2001-12-17 08:20 PM



serenity-
   Very cool metaphor, my friend.
   Wonderful!
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
4 posted 2001-12-18 11:56 PM


This one gave me a cold, sad feeling.. it feels like a lonely poem to me..
I like it.. well written
Lotsa luv,
Lynne

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

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