Open Poetry #18 |
Drift Away |
J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
I feel the change around us It's happening quickly It's happening more each day I'm drifting away Your smile once lit up my world Your laughter was music to my ear One could hang on every word you say Now though, I'm drifting away I stare at you detached Wondering if what I once felt was real Will it be ok... If I just drifted away? I gather my things to go And leave the past behind There's no point, why stay? Let me just drift away. You're no longer the one I knew You just aren't the same I know you don't want me here So I'll just drift away. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome to Passions, where you'll inevitably bump into more drifters. I enjoyed the imagery in your first post, and look forward to reading more. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wow, very powerful emotions here. You have expressed these feelings well. But nothing ever changes in life unless you try. No one ever succeeded by walking away. I hope you find the path to happiness. Welcome to Passions, J.K. All writing comes |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A wonderful entrance into Passions! Welcome! Please check your E-mail for a special Greeting! Karilea |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! Very Impressive First Post! I shall look forward to more of your work. ~Hugs, Nancy Lee~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sad sigh) So sad but beautiful, sweet friend, my heart cries out to your tears but I know deep down with all my heart true happiness and bliss will follow for you! (big hugggsssss) Our hearts cry out to yours, sweet friend, this is so sad but beautiful! Welcoe to Passions, sweet J.K, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (01-12-2002 09:19 PM).] |
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HumbleBee Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 52Kentucky |
A sad but beautiful poem, J.K., I wish you happiness always. Drifting away is the simplest thing to do, I suppose, but it seems as though happiness never comes easily, we have to fight for it and work hard to keep it. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Welcome to Passions! May you enjoy it here and make many new poet friends! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
well done. . . powerful emotions and excellent questions. . . welcome. . . please take a look around, I know that you'll like it here. . . -------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
A big hug to welcome you here and a kind comment on your powerful poem of emotions. It is sad that these emotions need to be expressed, but it is part of life and I hope the healing is quick if it was more than muse speaking here. Well done i hope to view more of your work soon! Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
J.K. Welcome to passions. Don't drift...fight with every ounce of your being and in fighting write for the path to hope is littered with the poems of those who have struggled through...and survive. Good write. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
your feelings are felt from your words... All emotions we each have felt from time to time..Welcome to PiP...keep writing.. |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
This was an excellently crafted poem... Remember that to feel emotions.. whether they be love or fear or loss.. is better than never to feel at all. Welcome to Passions Pepper |
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Sunset Member
since 2002-01-08
Posts 80 |
much power in this quiet write. My compliments. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
J.K Mitchell, Welcome to Paasions I'm sure you will love it here! This is a powerful first post.. I enjoyed. I can't wait to see more of your work. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Welcome J.K. You'll find this to be a very active and supportive forum and no doubt you'll both be affirmed in your writing and challenged as well with the many examples fo good work hereing. Glad you are here and hope to ssee more of your work. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
God, this is so utterly sad! Maybe she really does want you she's just feeling inadequate in some way and it hurts to be reminded if something went all fuzzy! This really moved me. Ask her!!!!!!!! Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family. Sometimes it's better to just go isn't it? But it doesn't make it hurt any less...I loved this. I hope to read more from you. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I tried to reply to this last night and my computer froze...(grrr)lol....I wanted to welcome you and to tell you, I felt this....and I am putting it safely into my library.......touches deep.... with all that you are... |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi J.K. Mitchell, This was a awesome first post, full of emotion and feeling thank you for sharing and a very big welcome to Passions. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh this is so sad JK but a nicely written poem of sadness. floria |
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