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Junk Food and Lies
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Junk Food and Lies |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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* A word of explanation: while interviewing a child as part of my job, I asked what the child had to eat, he replied my mother feeds me junk food and lies. These words of profound wisdom from one so young touched my heart and hence the rearrangement of those words to mean sonething else. Kethry Junk food and lies are all that she'll give With a half of a quarter waiting to live No standing ovation just pain through a sieve As junk food and lies are all that she'll give Her promises pie crust, broken with ease She will say anything trying to please No striking salvation to bring to your knees But pie crusted promises broken with ease Her word is her bond, a bond out of date With no redeem value, too long for the wait No grand oration to color her fate Worthless in bonding and valued through hate Junk food and lies are all that she'll show No hugs or no kisses while wanting to go No new creation no hearts aglow For junk food and lies are all she can know. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown [This message has been edited by Kethry (01-11-2002 07:59 AM).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is absolutely profound, Kethry, every line, says so very much "Out of the mouths of babes" right? thanks for this. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
It's rare to see rhyming quattrains anymore. Usually they tend to feel terse, contrived and artificial. Yours works however because of the context you provide and the sense of the speaker being a child. It all fits. Very well done indeed. never try to teach a pig to sing |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I liked this, Pie Crust promises, an especially good part when talking junk food. Gloom |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Keth, Good words, good thought, good write. Enjoyed |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Her promises pie crust, broken with ease She will say anything trying to please ......... Her word is her bond, a bond out of date With no redeem value, too long for the wait You take a phrase... and paint a portrait!! This is superb, Kethry! An excellent description of all too many for whom integrity is a foreign language... I love it! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Keth, I'm suspicious we may have some things in common. Such tragic inspiration! Now I'm dying to know what you do for a living, you busybody you. You expressed well a child's painful dilemna in life.  |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Kethry That is all my little boy will eat is junk food.We feed him no lies though,just lots of love.Your words of wisdom have astonished even a handsome young genious like myself.Very well done! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
BRAVO!!! I am so glad you took those profound words and put them into such a wonderful and heart touching poem. This is a poem that should be read by as many as possible...If only the mother could have heard such words...would it have made a difference...I wonder? BRAVO!!!STANDING OVATION!!!Thank you, so very much, for sharing this poem. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Kethry, this is such a powerful piece. So well written and heartbreaking too. You did a wonderful job on a painful subject. Cheryl |
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OWG Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 155California |
dug it Kethr' such a view you created |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Kethry,this has got to be one of your best!    Juanita |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
This is profound. Junk food teaches habits that will very quickly cause the poisoning of one's immune systems with contamination by toxins and free radicals, leading to early disease such as heart problems and cancer, killing the body. But this life is short, anyway, so maybe that could be forgiven. But to kill a sweet young soul causing death in eternity, by not giving love I believe is a much greater sin. To do both seems such a tragedy of great proportions that it is hard to conceive. Thank you for bringing light to such darkness. -Silver Streak Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  CLAPPING WILDLY!!! BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooooo marvelous, I'm marvelled at how you can write such a wonderful poem from this thought! (sigh) Wonderful, sweet friend, this child's words of wisdom echo with your own and give a sense of maturity and value through emotion! We all love you so much, sweet friend, your words are always a pleasure to read! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is absolutely the best writing of yours which I have ever had the pleasure of reading, and I have read some brilliant creations of yours. This one is so deep and thought provoking....and also, extremely well written.  BTW, Keth....what kind of job do you have? copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Yes, this is very good. But I have to say, it is hard watching a child grow up like this. Good work. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Keth, One of the best. Nan |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth darling sister of my heart and keeper of my soul YOU know what I think of this I told you it is UTTERLY UTTERLY fabulous writing. As always you excel darling girl. It does make me cry, but for this once I'll forgive you, still YOU will be paying penance until eternity. Stop feeling sorry for her everyone she loves paying penance Don't you darling girl? Say YES! Or the boys will be round MMmm. This is a keeper for certain When you write you give a gift rare and true Your pen gives life to the strife of the few They have no voice but you write their soul In words you portray their pain made whole Reveal without doubt the hurt and tragedy Of lives set in sorrow with no sight of beauty They would be mute and their tears unseen If it wasn’t for the words you write in between So thank you for revealing the lives they live And continue ever more with this gift you give  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 [This message has been edited by Marsha (01-11-2002 04:46 PM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks to all those who responded with such passion and praise, Irish...I thought it was profound I'm glad you did too. Canuckster, Thank you, It's rare to see someone who will give their honest opinion. Professor Gloom. Thanks I was trying to get across the impression of nothing good in this child's life. Sy, thanks, when you say it's good I know I must be close to getting it right. suthern, Thank you so much...*HuGGLeS* Larry, Thanks ...Don't you know, you should; it's the same as you used to do...I'm a professional gossip  sodpossom, thank you at least with your little boy it's his choice...besides which I know about your boy...he is very well loved. Startime, Thank you for the kind words and thanks especially for the hugs...I can use them about now. His Poet, I apreciate your praise...it was a difficult piece to start but once I did I was glad...the write was somewhat cathartic OWG, Thanks, nothing like having a hole to crawl into. N orth Carolina Girl, lovely lady, I was hoping my best was yet to come. Silver Streak, thank you for giving depth to my muse. Mistletoe Angel...I have a good heart and a good audience. That makes writing easy. Madame Chipmunk, thanks so much ...I'm in a secret service of sorts but if you've ever seen judging Amy you will know what I do...and why. mirror man, thanks your reflection is spot on. Pilgrimage, thanks it's an honour to receive such praise. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh my, this was heartwrenching Kethry. good write. floria |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kethry - and this from a young one. My, what thoughts the mother must have... BC |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Marsha, I totally blame you...after all you are my inspire. strbbux, thank you for the comment and the compassion. Bill, I agree but the sad p[art is the mother did not 'hear' the comment even though she was in the same room. Some people are blinded to the truth. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Her promises pie crust, broken with ease She will say anything trying to please No striking salvation to bring to your knees But pie crusted promises broken with ease Lynne - It sounds like this poor little kid already knows or at least feels that his mother doesn't even care for him that much. Such a sad write. The rhyme scheme, the rhythm, and the poem is excellent. Dave |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Kethry, I've been 'surfing backwards' tonight, since I missed so much lately. I homeschool my 14 yr old, and had to do Fall semester grade reports and new semester study plans. But I am so glad I did not miss this one. Junk food and lies are a common diet in many families, I'm sorry to say it's all too common here in USA, not just your territory. Keep encouraging that child to seek the truth, and to study nutrition and biology a bit more. It's amazing what the truth can do to change a person, if they are open to change. Thanks for a very good write! |
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