Open Poetry #18 |
In a White Room with Brown Monkeys |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
If I sat and typed forever Just hoping it was good Would I best the chimpanzees On my antique Underwood If I sucked each molecule And breathed in all the vapors I could get some good ideas From all the Liquid Paper? It would just be incidental Because I’m banging every key With my head, hand, and toes And whatever’s close to me The ribbon is running out And the ink is lookin’ funky Soon they’ll come replace me With a robotic typin’ monkey Someday they’ll find this poem In a pile of lesser reads They’ll declare I was a genius For its proof, I was indeed fd;jg;fdajhg;lkjhfgTHE ENDodfahg’ladskfhg[ifg [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (01-09-2002 10:09 AM).] |
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Ocelot Junior Member
since 2002-01-07
Posts 40Texas |
Creative...I got a kick outta this one. |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
I like it, I love it.. and .. I want some more ... Got a laugh and lots of enjoyment Pepper |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
don't know what to say 'cept "it's good" |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
wayoutwalt, the last line was deep and meaningful... but I don't think you can say it in public. funny write, at least they weren't brass monkeys. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
You are a genius, Walt. Now what happened to that little monkey smiley that looked like a dried up little...? Seriously, I loved it! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(giggles with delight) Ooohhhhhh...this is sooooo cute, sweet friend, monkey say monkey do!!! (smiles) I love it, sweet friend, you are always so delightful in your reads, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walter, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Walt- You genius, you... Great to see you back, my friend. Enjoyed this. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Well you reminded me of something I thought was interesting on tv a little earlier...a man had trained a chimpanze in martial arts...in this case a monkey will be wearing a belt...James |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Walt, there is no "robotic typin' monkey" that could replace you ... not by a long shot. Your creativity is endless. Thank you for the depth and thought that is behind these delightful lines. Best wishes, /Kit |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey waltie...there is such a sharp edge to your off the wall humor...very nice! Love the title and the wit within! Hugs, me bud! |
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Ven Member
since 2001-10-01
Posts 102U.K. |
Nice one! roflmfao. Very creative and very different. Gonna go read it again now cos I'm so impressed. Ven |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Wayout, A clever and delightful read. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Walt, it's good to see you back, and in fine form... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh, you were missed, and this is hilarious! ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this, wow... it's a delight! *S* Very creative! Never fear... you're not replaceable! *G* |
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