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A Softly Keener Place
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A Softly Keener Place |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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A Softly Keener Place I have been there in the gloaming following thoughts in whim of wake across all reason out of orbit into some far stranger gate Conversations past and present speeches made to unseen foes imagined failures planned revisions in and out this porthole go There is a picture lit and lovely deep inside the cave of see sometimes red and sometimes purple a kaleidoscope just made for me It is there to light the passage turn the rancor flay the thief just behind the turn of eyelash is the door to close out grief It is right to stay the questions the wretched mind tries to retain and listen how the peaceful cricket’s music of the night remains I'll remember velvet touches songs of laughter tears of grace behind the darkness night will take me to a softly keener place. ______ from 12-99 |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Sooooooooo beautiful, sweet Martie, I'm so happy you re-posted this for us all to see the beauty of love and magic in your heart that overshadows all sorrow and pain. (sigh) May we always find the beauty and happiness deep in our hearts to color every one of our tears in need! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet Martie, HAPPY NEW YEAR!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"It is there to light the passage turn the rancor flay the thief just behind the turn of eyelash is the door to close out grief" Oh my goodness Martie ... this is an incredible piece, powerfully emotive. The phrasing you've used is exemplary ... heightened by the beautiful flow of these tender words. What a beautiful verse ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is truly lovely, Martie. Joyce |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie this was truly a lovely write, and Kit picked my favorite part so ditto! ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
beautiful poetry Martie, a pleasure to read and experience. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I have been there in the gloaming following thoughts in whim of wake across all reason out of orbit into some far stranger gate Conversations past and present speeches made to unseen foes imagined failures planned revisions in and out this porthole go There is a picture lit and lovely deep inside the cave of see sometimes red and sometimes purple a kaleidoscope just made for me ========================= everything about your poetry is softly keen  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You know what I like about this, Martie? I can begin in the middle, work through both ends, start at the end and work up...or read it as written, and no matter which way I puzzle it, it all comes out on top... an excellent write... |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Martie, this is awesome, it just flowed. I love reading poetry like this, floria |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh,SweetSis~ 'There is a picture lit and lovely deep inside the cave of see sometimes red and sometimes purple a kaleidoscope just made for me It is there to light the passage turn the rancor flay the thief just behind the turn of eyelash is the door to close out grief It is right to stay the questions the wretched mind tries to retain and listen how the peaceful cricket’s music of the night remains I'll remember velvet touches songs of laughter tears of grace behind the darkness night will take me to a softly keener place.' And with this soft turn of phrase ... you have taken me to a 'softly keener place'. Exquisite ... just so perfectly 'Martiesque'~ Love you~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
....Beautiful Martie....simply beautiful... *~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~* |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Martie, A wonderful write. Liked the imagery. Happy New Year!  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* a poem filled with the softest memories that take you to that place. I went along with your through your words and found it to be a place I want to return to. Wonderful writing, with a vision that leaves the soul soothed. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yup...I've been digging again... So glad of it, too. This is a remarkable piece of work Martie...love the title, "softly keener"-- that is exceptionally descriptive. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I remember.... |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Beautiful and enjoyable!Very nice! |
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