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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-01-06 10:44 PM

I sleep in dreams

My eyes black

A butterfly pressed to glass

I wait for sympathy of

The on looker that held

The tiny dancer in arms of gold

The ships of sea have my

Memories trapped, in jaded ways

Blindly given of faith

I too held eternity

I think of your softness

In quiet times

How the still water drew me in

Now droplets of ancient time

In silence our foot prints

Sketch the shadows

In dust and sand

Where elements

Of life

Haunt the moon

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-06-2002 10:46 PM).]

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

1 posted 2002-01-06 10:47 PM

yes. . .a walk along the beach of time. . . where the waves dance that eternal ballet. . . and the choreographer is ever seen. . .

I like the flow of this Lauren. . . just like those waves. . . lapping at the shores of my mind. . . and sending me on. . . excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-01-06 10:49 PM

Lauren, this is so beautiful...just moves gently along like a ballet of words. Lovely...perfectly lovely. Hugs, Nancy

~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-01-06 11:21 PM

                                               A butterfly pressed to glass

                                                I wait for sympathy of

                                                The on looker that held

                                             The tiny dancer in arms of gold

                                               =============================

                                                  I too held eternity

                                                I think of your softness

                                                   In quiet times

                                             How the still water drew me in

                                              Now droplets of ancient time

                                               In silence our foot prints

                                                 Sketch the shadows

                                                  In dust and sand

                                                   Where elements

                                                      Of life

                                                   Haunt the moon
===========================================

Yes....yes....yes....and? sometimes hang the moon

Did you just know how much I needed to read your whispers tonite? *s*
and so you will also know I could hear "On The Sea" playing quietly in the background.
This is a beautiful write dear Poetess ... you wrap us in your imagery and memories and we walk that beach of understand with you.
peace and poetry Lauren
jm

Yes I've changed ...
so why couldnt you after all we've been thru,
could I blow your mind ... leave you breathless.

~TS~

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

4 posted 2002-01-07 12:04 PM

Lauren,
I don't know how you do this...but it is a pleasure to read and imagine. Thanks.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

5 posted 2002-01-07 12:17 PM

Sven~ your comments always mean so much to me thank you.....

Nancy~ Thank you always for reading, and for your thoughts....

HUGS
Janet Marie~ I

my twin

I am in a mood...*s*

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

6 posted 2002-01-07 12:18 PM

Larry~ I ramble alot to myself and sometimes just need to get it down...I thank you always for reading...

~~~
Be well Be safe...PEACE

~~~~~

all
Lauren

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-07-2002 12:23 AM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-01-07 12:44 PM

(smiles) Soooooooo beautifully soothing, sweet friend, your words always have us skipping to our toes and dancing in the ballet of your lovely words! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, I could feel the waves kissing my feet envisioning this! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2002-01-07 02:27 AM

Lauren, this one flows and flows, in and out of time and space, as if on a magical carpet ride.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

9 posted 2002-01-07 02:28 AM

This dripped down the page like candle wax from the wick of mood, and so smooth was its flow. Lauren, this was stunning work.

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

10 posted 2002-01-07 03:22 AM

Greeneyes - this is an exceptional writing. I like the style, and the flow. I also love the haunting moon. As a matter of fact, this one did inspire me. Thank you..

BC

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

11 posted 2002-01-07 07:54 AM

Lauren, I dont have to tell you how this whispers to me. Beautiful dear Lady. *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

12 posted 2002-01-07 10:11 AM

i agree with everyone..very lovely Lauren..we have watched each others poetry change the last four years and i think yours is at its peak...it is more beautiful now than ever...hugs

~Vic

"To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides."
~ David Viscott

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

13 posted 2002-01-07 06:52 PM

Thanks to all.....

all
you are much appreciated....

Be well Be safe....

PEACE

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-07-2002 06:53 PM).]

JAR
Junior Member

since 2001-11-06

Posts 34

14 posted 2002-01-13 11:55 AM

You already know how
this touches me.

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

15 posted 2002-01-13 11:59 AM

pleasure to read through... puzzled by the separation of on and looker...that was intentional? Nice imagery!

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

16 posted 2002-01-13 07:11 PM

This is so very beautiful. What a wonderful poem to read. I love it. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Robert A
Member

since 2001-10-29

Posts 174

17 posted 2002-01-16 04:11 PM

Green eyes, this is nice, and sure, everyone is fighting a battle! that's for sure

Robert

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

18 posted 2002-01-16 05:19 PM

This is a poem that speaks to my heart. Very soft and delicate.

Wonderful.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

19 posted 2002-01-16 07:48 PM

Beautifully written Lauren...very much so.
You Dun Gud...

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

20 posted 2002-01-16 09:21 PM

Thanks all, I appreciate the thoughts and replies....

all

Lauren~

*****

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-16-2002 09:22 PM).]

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