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Michael
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0 posted 2002-02-10 12:44 PM



A POET'S DEMISE


On nights like these, who shall appease
The hunger of the gods?
The Raven mist - ventriloquist,
Alone, might lay them odds.

Though crippling winds, who yet befriends
A man with sterile lips?
Or holds ‘er true love known but through
A Dummy's fingertips?

Is this but night, a shadow's bliss
Fallen immune to time?
Is this just blight, the benefice
Trapped deep within a rhyme?

A stifling muse, a queer presence,
Pragmatic to a cause.
Who could refuse, such dire essence,
To stand and meet her laws?

...To pass the gate of tethered Fate,
And walk an arduous mile?
...To face the night with grim delight
And live life in exile?

...To tow the line for fallen friend,
If given unto chance?
...Or call divine means, to an end,
For one's deliverance?

I'll dip the quill, thereby instill,
If staggered in my trust;
That name, once drawn upon the dawn
Of hope - now sifted dust

Thereby suffer to call of Death
In fast and forlorn way;
Ev'ry whisper upon my breath
Or thought I'd chance to say.

To pass my days, in due recourse,
A man without a voice;
The Dummy's gaze, of no remorse,
Seemingly leaves no choice.

And though I chose, by pen, the throes
Silent council must bear;
I must attest, if once thought best,
I simply, now, don't care.

With perverse laugh, on my behalf,
As sun slowly invades;
Amidst the seam of life and dream
The Dummy grins,
...and the poet fades.


Michael Anderson

02/10/02


But dreams of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned and die.


EAP



[This message has been edited by Michael (02-10-2002 01:35 PM).]

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peaches73533
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1 posted 2002-02-10 12:48 PM


Michael,
your poetry is definetly not fading.I wish I could write like this.Keep it up.
Peaches

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2 posted 2002-02-10 12:49 PM


"And though I chose, by pen, the throes
Silent council must bear;
I must attest, if once thought best,
I simply, now, don't care.

With perverse laugh, on my behalf,
As sleep slowly invades;
Amidst the seam of dark and dream
The Dummy grins,
...and the poet fades."




BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooooo hauntingly masterful, sweet friend, your words always have such a creative and expressive style that always makes me smile! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSS) I love it, sweet friend, may we all as poets make poetic justice of these ridicules and dummies and shine with hope in the end of every stanza, we all love you so much! I LOVE IT!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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3 posted 2002-02-10 12:54 PM


I loved the meter of this poem.The rhythm was hauntingly classical.

paladin

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4 posted 2002-02-10 01:00 PM


Wow, this is chilling, Michael.

One of your best, IMHO.

Corinne


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5 posted 2002-02-10 02:59 PM


"Is this just blight, the benefice
Trapped deep within a rhyme?"

See this? This is why I adore your writing.
Your faculty of the English language is without compare. And if I had to choose one word to describe it, it would be ELEGANT.

Kethry
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6 posted 2002-02-10 04:17 PM


Michael,
it's easy to see why you're no dummy. You do the English language proud and your expression of it is superb. It had such cadence and rhythm it helped me remember why I love your work so much.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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7 posted 2002-02-10 04:26 PM


Michael, pleasure meeting you and reading
this superb poem...

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8 posted 2002-02-10 04:42 PM


Your writing is so profound...leaves me speechless, shaking my head.
Fantastic write Michael.
~Hugs, Nancy~

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  So you won't ever forget me~

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9 posted 2002-02-10 05:19 PM


Though crippling winds, who yet befriends
A man with sterile lips?
Or holds 'er true love known but through
A Dummy's fingertips?

Is this but night, a shadow's bliss
Fallen immune to time?
Is this just blight, the benefice
Trapped deep within a rhyme?
=======================================

I'll dip the quill, thereby instill,
If staggered in my trust;
That name, once drawn upon the dawn
Of hope - now sifted dust
=====================================
Ev'ry whisper upon my breath
Or thought I'd chance to say.

To pass my days, in due recourse,
A man without a voice;
=====================================
And though I chose, by pen, the throes
Silent council must bear;
I must attest, if once thought best,
I simply, now, don't care.

With perverse laugh, on my behalf,
As sun slowly invades;
Amidst the seam of life and dream
The Dummy grins,
...and the poet fades.
=================================

You are poetry...if cut..you would bleed rhyme, its a part of who you are, its your voice when you have no other way to express or be heard...and while I do so understand, for some loss, it wont ever be enough...still like oxygen, it must be.
Another achingly beautiful, haunted write M,
your gifts are many ... you're an exceptional poet.
jm

You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes.
My body aches to breathe your breath ... your words keep me alive.

~Sarah McLachlan~

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10 posted 2002-02-10 05:25 PM


I found this eerie, scary and superb!!! MORE, please!
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11 posted 2002-02-10 05:59 PM


I don't know what to say to this other than I really like it. It's definately thought provoking... Thanks for the read!
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12 posted 2002-02-10 06:11 PM


Michael, you should make it a point to get published. This, like most of your works are truly outstanding.

~Tier

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13 posted 2002-02-10 07:34 PM


Michael, I sit in stunned admiration. Truly amazing writing.
Sandra

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14 posted 2002-02-10 07:39 PM


I couldn't pick out a part I liked more than any other.  I liked it all, very strong, very balanced, great meter and rhythm.  The earlier comments are right.  You should pursue publication!!!


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15 posted 2002-02-10 07:40 PM


A beautiful write, Michael. Enjoyed!
-newell

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Suetang
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16 posted 2002-02-10 08:46 PM


Hello Michael

This was so well written and so very much enjoyed by this reader.

Take care......Sue

Suetang

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17 posted 2002-02-10 08:54 PM


Very creative! I enjoyed this Michael! *S*
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18 posted 2002-02-10 09:50 PM


Do poets ever die? I doubt it, for their words keep the spirit alive. Even if a poet forever lay down his pen, he would live always. This was awesome and so well done.

sky


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19 posted 2002-02-10 10:13 PM


Michael--You are an outstanding poet!
Michael
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20 posted 2002-02-10 11:54 PM


Thank you all for the kind replies.  I honestly didn't think too much of this piece but am glad it drew such a nice reception.

LOL - I almost named it "Big Dummy."  Glad I gave it a more serious title now.


Michael



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21 posted 2002-02-11 12:25 PM


I hope these writes take good effort, cause if they just roll off the pen..... damn I'd hate that..

Parker

Nan
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22 posted 2002-02-12 08:21 AM


Methinks this poet NEVER fades... Nice one, Mike..

Johnnie
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23 posted 2002-02-12 06:47 PM


do you think a poet ever stops being one?
this is to me, in my opinion, just a real poem, what it should be, but do they stop being a poet I mean.

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