Open Poetry #18 |
Oh, how I love their call to me (Bird Ballad reading in class) |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
A bird was born to take its flight Against the Wind to weave A nut, a corn, a bit of seed If none then he will leave My soul is pecked by speckled beak And bathed by now a lark Who sings a song of mischief-love? That finds me in the dark Now sightless eyes, I still can hear The Wind blows whispered words You sing a song to fill my heart As trees fill up with birds --- A seed is sown-yes, buried there No, Order doesn't mind For things might mean just what they say If poetry is blind No tracks upon my soul you see I check it every morn The person in the mirror's me No bird was ever born The lark still stirs within my breast The birds up in the tree Just want to exorcise my lust In potent fallacy |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful Walt!!! I like the rhythm of this poem but the thought of having birds peck out MY eyes would scare me!! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love birds so so much, your gorgeous words echo with their callings! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walter, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Cool dude!!! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Flow is very good to me. I'll bet it sounds perfect read out loud. I like how it seemed to start out simple and get more interesting as it went. I also like the part about poetry and blindness. Can I sit in class with ya next time? LOL! Lord knows, I'm needing some! Be well! For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your creativity is showing! I liked the last verse best of all. Nice going Walt~ |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Your words have taken flight.This poem is just ducky.Well enough of these bird brained comments. paladin |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Wayout, Rhyme, rhythm, and throngs. Chirpin' and burpin'(can't go wrong) bird-calls is my fav'rite song. Nice poem Walt, see-ya, so-long. Doc |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank yuhs thank yuhs yuh |
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