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A Secret |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
A secret haunting she never shares Lies deep within her soul She trods mornings of backpacks and corn flakes Before the school bell rings it's toll On the television, commercials play Their cadence blends in the mix With a start she catches a phrase And stops dead in her tracks They found the missing girl Face down in a knee deep stream Then pictures of a mother stifling Her aching, wrenching screams Thoughts quickly recede for her To a moment back in time To a man a girl was tricked Into walking close behind His car had 50's wingtips A taped window in the back She imagined other children kicking When they knew that they were trapped He drove her home, then turned away To an empty cul-de-sac In mercies care she knows no more The mind has left it black She pulls her daughter closely now Without a single word Dons coat and hood, disguising curls Against cries-"I look a nerd!" In moments next a strained "Good-bye" She lets go a horrid sigh Her greatest sin she feels somehow Is her existence, here and now He set her free to live and relive What can happen without warn That child lives within this woman Who is still that little girl |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Amusemi, A good write and I enjoyed the read. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this...James |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssss) Sooooooo wonderfully bittersweet, sweet freind, I hope soon the spirit of the child in her laughs and smiles and she can embrace the world again with a smile! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is sad but beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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PearlsB4Swine Member
since 2002-02-01
Posts 130where the heart finds me |
Amusemi...it hurts to feel, doesn't it? Did this have some relevance to real life that caused you to write it? It was brilliant, yet sort of squishes the soul to think about it. Very very good writing. Take care, PB4S |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write, although a frightening occurence. Good work. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I couldn't stop the tears from falling while reading this..... |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
amusemi, A wrenching poem. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
An all to home-hitting story that could be anyone's really. This was a heart-wrenching story that is heard far too often on the new. Excellent writing. The older I grow, the less important the comma becomes. |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Your words of fright hit home for me. As I have felt the pain you have clearly seen. But if nothing else always know this. You once again will feel bliss. You will take back your beautiful life. You will stand up and make that fight. And I'll be there right by your side. Never ever running to hide. For if you need a true friend. I'll be there till the very end. Peaches |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is haunting and chillingly breathtaking...hard to read...and yet harder not to read. superb writing of imagery and depth of expression. take care, jm You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes. |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Thank you all very much for your heart felt comments. Just believe... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
haunting. . . yes. . . very much so. . . well done. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* dear one,,that little girl is still crying out for you to love her...you need to go back to the little girl in you and let her know that you love her and how that it was not her fault...I know of what I speak...sigh I had to create a character to help me go back and do some hugging of the little girl in me...mmmmmm I am going to post a poem...it may seem long but ....I think you will understand it...and yes...it is from real life...**big big hugs** I love that little girl in you. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
In very simple words...Not her fault!! I know this is hard to finally understand.. I understand it very well...one of every six males are molested in their lifetimes.. I was one of those one of six...No...I didn't face the terror of the captor... the physical pain...the fear...mine was far more innocent...though equally damaging.. I too had to learn...and learn from months of painful memories...thinking back about the abuse..about all of the things that went wrong for so many years....I had a secret too...It took me 40 plus years before I ever talked about it... Writing this..took great courage for you.. Thank you deeply for sharing it...I hope that your pain lessens...and I hope that little girl has been forgiven...for it never ever was her fault... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
amusemi - an excellent write, many feelings told with your words. BC [This message has been edited by Bill Charles (02-10-2002 08:52 PM).] |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Oh Mangus, There are so many whose lives have been affected by predators...most are victimized by someone they know and that is why it is so invisible. I am a bit embarrassed and feeling a bit naked right now...thank you Mangus for saying what you have. It reminds me that maybe the best thing to come out of this is that when victims bring it into the light, those who are going through the healing process can see they are not alone. The moral I guess: Once a victim doesn't ever mean always a victim!! I really cherish all of you... Kat |
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