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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(I was inspired to write this after seeing the movie "Kandahar", which is about a woman trying to meet her sister in Afghanistan to save her. This is a vision I had!  Corona By: Noah Eaton 2/7/02 I watch the sun rise Rising in the east You clasp your hope close But it is all just a dream Humming songs of crows Songs of black and white You try to reach the edge of the ocean But you're encumbered by fields of mines The king of yesterday Has resigned your throne to you You are on your own now Can you make it on your own all through? Love is here I know down deep inside But what is it worth When there is no sign? Is this the last stop? It's a long distance from here My mind seems so unclear Save me, my time is fading Save me today… Before the corona fades to black I can hear the wind Crying with laments Children stumbling Men falling with lost limbs Don't drink the water There's something sickening everyone Will you give me some bread, please? Is this the last stop? It's a long distance from here My mind seems so unclear Save me, my time is fading Save me today… Before the corona fades to black Don't leave me… Don't leave me please… Don't let my sun fall… Don't let my sun fall… Hope, where are you? You're so righteous to me Have you betrayed me? Are you just a mirage to me? It's a long distance from here My mind seems so unclear Save me, my time is fading Save me today… Before the corona fades to black Where is time taking me? Where is time taking me? Don't let my sun fall... Don't let my sun fall... Don't sacrifice me... Don't sacrifice me... [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-07-2002 03:04 PM).] |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
A very emotional,powerful write my friend!Very well done! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
An amazing poem. Not only powerful and emotional, but also with a great meassage. Great job!  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Quite a vision, Noah! Very impressive write. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* sadly beautiful, Noah...a poem that touches the deepest emotions...**big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i must see that movie..thank you for posting dear one..enjoyed your words as always  Hugs~Victoria~ You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh, sweet Noah, this is so sad! Now I will go and see the movie. Excellent write here as always. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Noah, this has such gut-wrenching emotion to it. Great job but it's sad that poems like this reflect was is happening in so much of our world. 'I can hear the wind Crying with laments Children stumbling Men falling with lost limbs Don't drink the water....' How totally pathetic. Some day, please Lord, there will be peace and harmony and freedom for all. Hugs, Marti " My wrinkles are badges of courage and reveal that I am a Mother." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Noah, this gave me chills. Sad truths about the world, very well written. Sandra |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
An emotional write. Certainly made me stop and think. Cheers. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Noah, beautiful words. "Hope, where are you? You're so righteous to me Have you betrayed me? Are you just a mirage to me?" Very nicely done. floriaFloria |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - wow, a lot of emotion I see here. An excellent powerful write... By the way, please check your email... BC |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Lovely in its sadness, this is a powerful piece. I am very impressed. You've done well in conveying the distress and fear that must be so pervasive there. Bravo, dear ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
sad!but enjoyed it |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Good writing Noah...James |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A movie being your inspiration certainly cranked out a wonderful poem Noah. It is so sad that this could be a poem about so many people in so many places, and your poem packs a punch! The older I grow, the less important the comma becomes. Let the reader |
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