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wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)

0 posted 2002-02-07 11:28 AM


The room is vast
Its speeding passed
But why its fast
I cannot ask

I cannot ask
The reason why
I cannot last
Within your eyes

The page is long
I'm writing songs
But still
There's something wrong
Beyond
Everything that's right

The last note
It will not play
I've tried it every way
Each note a half
Each rest a whole
The cadence of my soul
Like child who jams the keys
In random Rock n' Roll
There's no escape
In your eyes
Yet still
I yearn
to learn
their rhythm

Baby, I need instruction

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (02-07-2002 11:34 AM).]

© Copyright 2002 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
skyshine
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1 posted 2002-02-07 11:31 AM


very sweet Walt....I liked it a lot.

sky

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Deep in the heart
2 posted 2002-02-07 11:33 AM


Instruction is good

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2002-02-07 11:40 AM


There's something wrong
Beyond
Everything that's right

Oh yuh!!  I like it I like it.



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4 posted 2002-02-07 11:55 AM




(sigh) Soooooooo lovely, sweet friend, may she always teach you the beauty and joy of true love just as you will always instruct her forever and ever! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walter, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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5 posted 2002-02-07 11:58 AM


im sure you will have no problem receiving Instruction


wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)
6 posted 2002-02-07 12:00 PM


thanks guys
Madame Chipmunk
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7 posted 2002-02-07 02:52 PM


It looks like you got this one right, Walt...without any instructions too!
But if you need some...
I'll throw this book at you

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

cruz
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8 posted 2002-02-07 06:44 PM


The females' knees are bucklin right about now.  Flows like a mountain stream.  Everything just makes cents.
elisaseyes
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fort worth texas
9 posted 2002-02-08 12:11 PM


Baby? Sey Hey don't you worry... I got your money I got your money...
Nan
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10 posted 2002-02-08 08:54 AM


Listen to Elisa... She knows of what she speaks...
Irish Rose
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11 posted 2002-02-08 09:13 AM


good to read you again, Walt...uh huh

Kathleen--(Kay)
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Laurie Lee



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12 posted 2002-02-08 11:52 AM


Sounds like fun to me..i like the way this flowed..enjoyed

                  ~Victoria~

You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses.

                                                -Ziggy

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13 posted 2002-02-08 12:47 PM


I really liked this, Walt.  And yeah, nothing wrong with asking for a little help.
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