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The Curse Of Eros - Majorly revised from a long time ago
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The Curse Of Eros - Majorly revised from a long time ago |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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The Curse Of Eros  I rebuke thee...as I cry to drown in sigh through the dusk of dark teasing idly by, so shall I curse thy name ev'ry nightfall for refusing to deliver love when I call ~ Heart strings cut, tiresome dance doth end, a fool, 'twas I, to have been your friend, you anchored my ship and delayed my desire, you threw my all into fury's fire. I die a thousand deaths from arrow's sting never to wear eternal gold ring... devoid of affection, humbled by rejection unable to heal this lonely infection ~ I damn you Cupid, god of love and beshrew the smug light above, you pranced and laughed on wing while I wept for contract, broken and vows unkept ~ Hide now from skin, forlorn leave me to wallow in Venus scorn, make deaf your ears, benevolent moon dare not pity this moanful tune, reveal not this spirit, cloaked in pain as I swallow the blood of heart, now slain ~ I condemn you Eros, king of sly I paint the stars grim, throw curse to the sky, I'm weary of waiting for the train of destiny to lay 'pon the tracks, chained by decree ~ Set my soul aflame to burn this passion dead to saturate in truth - fate's misfit, unwed, valentine wishes fade to nevermore, dreams, they scream on bedroom floor as winter howl blackens dawn to decay aspirations rupture in cold disarray ~ Alas, I renounce this shell of distress as yearn for "the one", numbs to nothingness in envy's suffocation to stain with tears of jade, bitterness of breath, ungranted prayers hath made By Melissa P. Monette |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
you're back~ Oh my goodness, this poor little cupid is being torn to shreds! What a write, Melissa! Kathleen--(Kay) |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
WOW!!!!!  An awesome write here.peaches |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Melissa, you are one amazing poet. This is an incredible piece of writing, and I just love the style you write in.  and I've often thought the little beastie, has been shooting crocket arrows and needs his bow crunched at times...  mind if I plagerize your style... lol. Parker |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hide now from skin, forlorn leave me to wallow in Venus scorn, make deaf your ears, benevolent moon dare not pity this moanful tune, reveal not this spirit, cloaked in pain as I swallow the blood of heart, now slain ~ I condemn you Eros, king of sly I paint the stars grim, throw curse to the sky, I'm weary of waiting for the train of destiny to lay 'pon the tracks, chained by decree ~ ====================================== Well what can I say to this... Classic Melissa purging here... I went and found the first one in 12 to compare and I really like the changes... youve tightened it up and added to its impact of ripping emote... I especially like the vocab and language, and the imagery is done to stark bleeding perection. Like a Valentine from hell No one does it like you can girlie...this is black lace and daggers for sure... A Poe style Valentines me thinks very well done Melissa ...Im not too fond of the day myself..but I'd always hope we can write a "happy ever after". You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Powerful Melissa, and I love this style. fantastic write. floria Floria |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Melissa, I can feel your heart breaking in these words, my heart goes out to you; sometimes cupids make mistakes but he will make it up to you soon when you are showered with cupids arrows and you find your on etrue love who will make you happy forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend this is so sad but gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I wish you great happiness, you are the best and deserve true happiness! Love it! Joanna |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, To me this is an epopee. It could not be better. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Melissa, bleeding hearts have nothing on you! Wow. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Awesome! But how can you destroy an illusion? Illusions always lie. Try the real thing. ((Melissa)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well, I guess you told him (it) how the cow eats the cabbage! Fiesty write Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Melissa - wow, this is some mighty fine writing. I almost missed it, and now glad that I didn't... BC |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
WOW! Melissa; incredibly beautiful writing..and you gave old cupid just what he deserves when he falls down on the job!!! Hugs; Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Melssa, did I say how much this hits home? And how very very well you wrote this? Maybe it will wake up the Gods to the plight of so any. Sandra |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Melissa, You write with such passion and conviction!I would hate to be the one scorned by your wrath (ha ha). Write On Sister, Dennis :^) P.S. Happy Valentines Day! [This message has been edited by Dennis L. White (02-12-2002 08:31 PM).] |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Melissa, Wonderful, as always... Cupid can be a cruel little cherub, can't he? Happy Valentine's Day.... Love, Elise |
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