song writer i'm not..lol..but see what you think..

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dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

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High Springs, Florida

0 posted 2002-02-04 12:45 PM

(i'm not a songwriter!..but i found these songs--about 5 of them--that i wrote in the late 80's back when i used to just make up stuff to sing..lol ..if someone who writes songs/music can give me some pointers..maybe they'd be worthy of calling them songs...? anyway..i'll post them here, and you can beat them up..but gently..and one at time!

haha!!)

(for alan)

v. 1
standing by the wall
i see you walking
going through the motions
of your life
i see you painting scenes
of abstract mystery
and i wonder what it is
you hold inside

v. 2
walking by the wall
you see me standing
going through the motions
of my life
holding out your hand
you catch a falling tear
and i wonder if it heals you
to heal me

*(chorus)
together we can see the light
together we can hold on tight
a tear thats shed
is gently wiped away
together we can laugh out loud
to stand out in an angry crowd
together we can swiftly fly away

v. 3
living in the world
we walk our way now
leaving far behind
our wall of fear
hand in hand we smile
as our hearts have
been entwined
and i wonder how it is
that we became

*
together we can see the light
together we can win the fight
a tear thats shed
is gently wiped away
together we can laugh out loud
to stand out in an angry crowd
together we can swiftly fly away

** (bridge?)
and when we meet
i'll hold out my hand
just as you have always done for me
and when we meet
my love will be the same
just as yours for me
has never changed

*
(chorus again...)

-dgvarner
feb '89

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"and i'd give up forever to touch you..cause i know you can feel me somehow..." -googoo dolls

[This message has been edited by dgvarner (02-04-2002 12:47 PM).]

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17

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1 posted 2002-02-04 12:58 PM

I wish I could hear the melody. Love the words...

~Tier

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Member Rara Avis

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Deep in the heart

2 posted 2002-02-04 01:34 PM

Yes, turn up the music

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

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with you

3 posted 2002-02-04 01:50 PM

I know nothing of writing songs, but I really like the feel of this

I too wish I could hear how you hear it

peppermint35
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since 2000-05-28

Posts 1106
Texas, USA

4 posted 2002-02-04 02:44 PM

What Sea said!!!

I can almost hear the melody.. but the words are truly beautiful

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-02-04 02:49 PM

YAY!!! Ooohhhhhhh...I am writing my first song ever for the John Lennon Somgwriting Contest, and I otherwise know nothing about songwriting, but this is sooooooooo gorgeous, I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) This is sooooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I am so happy you shared this to us all, you have such wonderful talent, we all love you so much! YAY!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2002-02-04 08:20 PM

don't say that ! I thought it was very lyrical

Kathleen--(Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

7 posted 2002-02-04 09:04 PM

BRAVO!!! I could feel the music flowing through each word of this poem...Magnificent..**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

8 posted 2002-02-05 08:19 AM

wishing i had more time...

but a quick thank you to all of you for reading my bit of scribble!!

i only partially remember the 'tune' on the songs as theyve been in a box for quite some time..but i'd love to share more of them, if not all of them to see what you think--soon as i get another min to post..!!

thanks again...

hugs, g

ps..if anyone is so inclined..feel free to write some music to these puppies! lol

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"and i'd give up forever to touch you..cause i know you can feel me somehow..." -googoo dolls

Parker
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since 2000-01-06

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9 posted 2002-02-05 11:28 AM

dg, really liked the flow and words for this.

So you sing, sing me a lullabye some night please.

Parker

Alan
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since 2000-09-12

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right next door

10 posted 2002-02-05 04:51 PM

dg... i think this is beautiful as a poem and a song.. I hope to see more like this from you
alan

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

11 posted 2002-02-05 05:04 PM

dg, This is excellent! Just wish I could hear the melody....son is a singer/guitar player, I'll show it to him. Good stuff!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

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South Florida

12 posted 2002-02-05 05:07 PM

Awwwwww, this is a beautiful song, I'm beginning to learn to play the guitar and am learning how to songwrite, this would make a beautiful song. Love it!

Joanna

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