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Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

0 posted 2002-02-04 11:36 AM

Let me lie here
in the silence
in the darkness
just a moment longer
and remember us

Let me lie here
just a moment longer
because I have no idea
what else to do with this day

[This message has been edited by Duncan (02-04-2002 11:37 AM).]

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2002-02-04 11:41 AM

you mean besides write this perfect moment in time set to verse?
classic Duncan poetry...linger on poet sir

You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes.
My body aches to breathe your breath ... your words keep me alive.

~Sarah McLachlan~

Silver Streak
Member Elite

since 2002-01-02

Posts 3625
FL, USA

2 posted 2002-02-04 11:42 AM

Go ahead! Just relax! Enjoy!

-newell

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

3 posted 2002-02-04 11:43 AM

nice...

regards,
sudhir

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2002-02-04 11:52 AM

touching deep in my heart with this Cowboy.....pulling the heartstrings here.....

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2002-02-04 12:03 PM

Well done, indeed!
You conveyed feelings of despair is two short stanzas.
I loved it.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

6 posted 2002-02-04 12:19 PM

Deeply touching... says so much in so few words.

Enjoyed reading!

~Tier

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

7 posted 2002-02-04 12:50 PM

Damn, can I feel this one...deep into my heart....hey, mind if I lay there beside you and remember for a little while too??

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

[This message has been edited by Tracey (02-04-2002 01:09 PM).]

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

8 posted 2002-02-04 01:05 PM

simply...WOOOOOOW

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

9 posted 2002-02-04 01:38 PM

Sorry you are having one of those depressed days. Sometimes the whole idea of getting up and carrying on with the day seems so much more trouble than it is worth.
Good writing, Hope you feel happier soon.
Sandra

peppermint35
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1106
Texas, USA

10 posted 2002-02-04 02:49 PM

Duncan, if I say I can identify.. is that enough...

I think not.. you've written this with great truth... very powerful.

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

11 posted 2002-02-04 03:40 PM

I think you just explained why I spend so much time TRYING to sleep...this one made me wanna crawl back under the covers!

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

12 posted 2002-02-04 05:12 PM

*sigh* I know this feeling too well...so let me give you hugs to help with your day. **big big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

13 posted 2002-02-04 05:24 PM

(big huggggsssssss) So very sad but beautiful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you in your despair and I pray with all my heart that love will again greet you warmly and its afterglow of joy will alwyas sing in your heart! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!