Open Poetry #18 |
Time Slips |
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
And I know, I know you What I feel in my dreams How you feel We have connection Yet our path Has parted so many times No words could reveal What you mean to me How you have trembled my heart, You speak of my love Whispering to flesh The need of passion You feel In melodies of Romantic impulses And emotion I speak your name Far beyond the boundaries Of scarlet oceans, Woven fantasies, Xanadu memories, Memories I tuck away In boxes gathering dust And heartache In some old forgotten attic Is this what it comes too? Of some other time, of long ago years? Your beauty haunts My days upon this earth In soft spoken verses Yet, I can never say good-bye and time will slip away Step through the barrier of my mind, enter my soul, feel my desire, let my eyes guide you into the shadows of my heart [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-04-2002 11:21 AM).] |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Very beautiful! Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I think you just said it all Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
liked the poem... most of all, I like the way you write, and the way the words come out... regards, sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
No words could reveal What you mean to me How you have trembled my heart, You speak of my love Whispering to flesh The need of passion You feel In melodies of Romantic impulses And emotion I speak your name Far beyond the boundaries Of scarlet oceans, Woven fantasies, Xanadu memories, =================================== Your beauty haunts My days upon this earth In soft spoken verses Yet, I can never say good-bye and time will slip away ==================================== time may pass, but the love and the memories remain and keeps us warm, as does your beautiful poetry. Touches my heart every time. Thank you for that Poetess L. You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
yes, I sure know this feeling, Lauren, it's a sad one at best.... Kathleen--(Kay) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Lauren, sounds like there are too many of us here with this sad memory. This is so good, so well expressed, and so heartbreaking. Sandra |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
"Your beauty haunts My days upon this earth In soft spoken verses" How can sadness be portrayed so beautifully? Yes, this could also be my memories. You've done very well with this one, my friend. Excellent work! *hugs* Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, Fascinating write of love seemingly lost. Extremely well done! Thanks. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) So very sad but beautiful, sweet friend, I hope you cherish all these sweet memories always, as my heart cries out to you and the heartache you feel and I pray with all my heart you will hold true love close forever and your love will be timeless and is bound to last to eternity! (kiss on cheek) All our hearts go out to you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
How well you have expressed this, Lauren.. sad as it is.. time does allow things to slip.. quietly.. into a place that the heart can handle.. I can relate.. all too well. Pepper |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* heartbreakingly beautiful...This is a stunning poem that brings tears to my eyes and heart. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lauren, you pretty much penned a whole pile of truth and lots of feelings...don't attics ever get full of letters and things?? NOPE...cause that is where I would have put mine... Nicely done Lauren...enjoyed.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - you write some beautiful poetry. Like them very much... BC |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Very poignant poem Lauren, and you spoke such truth of wasted time in heartache or sadness. Well done in only the style that is yours alone. ~* Carpe' Diem *~ |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A hauntingly beautiful and romantic poem, Lauren. Great job.....again! copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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