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peppermint35
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0 posted 2002-02-03 03:23 AM



Shattered pieces like windowglass
Held together by their edges
Tenuous appearing spider strands
A single breath could part them

Inside a frenzied molten rock
A pressure cooker steaming
One more ingredient to the pot
Lava flow unending

Laughter that borders lunacy
Undertones of madness
Tears always on the surface
Sliding down without sound

No ease, no rest though weary
In this manic state
Clear thought out of the question
Images like an acid trip

Lost, oh lost, whispers the mind
As the last illusion shatters
And nothing is left of feeling
Except that faithful friend .... despair

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley

© Copyright 2002 Lavenia Crosley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-03 06:39 AM


Very nice work , Enjoyed it

Whiskey

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2 posted 2002-02-03 07:55 AM



I know this feeling, Pepper, both as a person, and as a mother, and you've expressed it from the within, out...

well done, my dear...very well done...

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3 posted 2002-02-03 10:02 AM


Pepper darling girl Oh my stars how achingly real this is. I hope darling heart that you are not experiencing this awful heart wrenching at the moment.

But how well you write anguish darling girl, I remember this, overwhelming sense of despair and pain. And every single syllable in this outstandingly good piece screams with the pain of it all.

Fabulous writing darling girl utterly utterly fabulous


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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4 posted 2002-02-03 10:16 AM


pepper - sadness for sure, but hang in there. Words of prayer for you that things will change for you...

BC

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5 posted 2002-02-03 10:18 AM


Oh my this is so heartbreaking. I have to tell you, I know the exact feeling, and what can you do about it, except write it? I don't know. You sure did write it well, though. And I hope its just a write and not our current feelings.
Sandra

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6 posted 2002-02-03 10:20 AM


enjoyed
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7 posted 2002-02-03 10:22 AM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Lavenia, I know just how ou feel and my heart cries out to you and prayts that very soon you will turn your back on Despair and befriend Hope and Laughter always! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSS) We all love you so much, sweet freind, believe me, I feel this way all the time myself, all our hearts are with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lavenia, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

peppermint35
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8 posted 2002-02-04 03:41 AM


Thank you Whiskey.. I'm glad....

Sunshine, coming from you, those words mean a great deal to me..

Marsha, unfortunately my friend.. it's all too real right now.. but I'm writing it out..

BC, thank you.. that helps

Sandra, it's the only therapy that seems to come even close to helping..

Vandana, thank you.

Noah, it helps .. keep on sending.. I'm trying to receive

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley

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9 posted 2002-02-05 09:35 AM


Well, gal, if'n ah might add sum wurds ov encouragement heer ah'd hav to say yore therapy iz wurkin' jest fine.  Ah luv yore wurk, but we allus new Texicans wure gud riterz

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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10 posted 2002-02-05 09:37 AM


This is a great description of despair, and a really downer poem.  Nicely written.
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11 posted 2002-02-05 09:38 AM


P~ this touches my heart....I know how this feels, (the same yet different) stirred memories in me.....*hugs*
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