Open Poetry #18 |
Shattered |
peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Shattered pieces like windowglass Held together by their edges Tenuous appearing spider strands A single breath could part them Inside a frenzied molten rock A pressure cooker steaming One more ingredient to the pot Lava flow unending Laughter that borders lunacy Undertones of madness Tears always on the surface Sliding down without sound No ease, no rest though weary In this manic state Clear thought out of the question Images like an acid trip Lost, oh lost, whispers the mind As the last illusion shatters And nothing is left of feeling Except that faithful friend .... despair Pepper |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Very nice work , Enjoyed it Whiskey |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I know this feeling, Pepper, both as a person, and as a mother, and you've expressed it from the within, out... well done, my dear...very well done... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Pepper darling girl Oh my stars how achingly real this is. I hope darling heart that you are not experiencing this awful heart wrenching at the moment. But how well you write anguish darling girl, I remember this, overwhelming sense of despair and pain. And every single syllable in this outstandingly good piece screams with the pain of it all. Fabulous writing darling girl utterly utterly fabulous Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
pepper - sadness for sure, but hang in there. Words of prayer for you that things will change for you... BC |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my this is so heartbreaking. I have to tell you, I know the exact feeling, and what can you do about it, except write it? I don't know. You sure did write it well, though. And I hope its just a write and not our current feelings. Sandra |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Lavenia, I know just how ou feel and my heart cries out to you and prayts that very soon you will turn your back on Despair and befriend Hope and Laughter always! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSS) We all love you so much, sweet freind, believe me, I feel this way all the time myself, all our hearts are with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lavenia, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Thank you Whiskey.. I'm glad.... Sunshine, coming from you, those words mean a great deal to me.. Marsha, unfortunately my friend.. it's all too real right now.. but I'm writing it out.. BC, thank you.. that helps Sandra, it's the only therapy that seems to come even close to helping.. Vandana, thank you. Noah, it helps .. keep on sending.. I'm trying to receive Pepper |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well, gal, if'n ah might add sum wurds ov encouragement heer ah'd hav to say yore therapy iz wurkin' jest fine. Ah luv yore wurk, but we allus new Texicans wure gud riterz Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
This is a great description of despair, and a really downer poem. Nicely written. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
P~ this touches my heart....I know how this feels, (the same yet different) stirred memories in me.....*hugs* |
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