Cardinal Points (Inspired by Karilea's "War" poem

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LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

0 posted 2002-02-02 11:45 PM

I couldn't choose the cardinal point
That would grant the wisest choice.
North or south, east or west,
Each called with its own voice.

And so my heart lied in between
Where the ordinals meet as one
Equidistant from love and loss
From what is and won't become.

In the nadir of these times
I felt thrust into the breach
The compass called but I held back
From the dreams within my reach.

Time moved on, the world turned,
Magnetic North shifted off the pole.
My compass turned in response to these
And thereby pinned my wondering soul.

For the nexus of the cardinal points
Is the only place that remains the same.
Where changes in time and destiny
Are not affected by love and pain.

It's there I chose to stay in place
Thereby losing what I could have won.
No pain, no loss, no love, nor joy,
No chance to change what I'd become.

The directions are there, free for choice,
The axis isn't the place to remain.
Not choosing to move is choosing to lose,
Everything you stand to gain.

[This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (02-02-2002 11:51 PM).]

Martie

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1 posted 2002-02-02 11:55 PM

Wow...very powerful writing here, Sir!

LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

2 posted 2002-02-03 12:05 PM

Thanks, Martie - ya lil sweetie.

[This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (02-03-2002 12:07 AM).]

Mysteria

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3 posted 2002-02-03 12:49 PM

Excellent advise! This unfortunately is what separates the thinkers from the doers

I loved this one.

~* Carpe' Diem *~

Midnitesun

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4 posted 2002-02-03 01:12 AM

"Time moved on, the world turned,
Magnetic North shifted off the pole.
My compass turned in response to these
And thereby pinned my wondering soul."

Wow, what a great poem. I love the way you encompassed love and loss. And the ending is perfect.
"Not choosing to move is choosing to lose,
Everything you stand to gain"

(And not a single kitty was injured in the making of this poem!)

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

5 posted 2002-02-03 07:09 AM

Bravo! This is great! As Midnitesun commented, not an injured kitty in the crowd over the making of this Keeper...

Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 2002-02-03 08:01 AM

Ditto on Sunshine's BRAVO!
That amazing poet in you was so well profiled in this piece.
You are amazing, you know
Liz

Kethry
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7 posted 2002-02-03 09:36 AM

LJA,
I could say you are a man without direction but that would change the point of the poem. Well done sir.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

catalinamoon

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8 posted 2002-02-03 10:23 AM

You know, I take these as very wise words. Must dwell upon them a bit.
Sandra

Nan

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9 posted 2002-02-03 02:17 PM

Indeed... We can't win if we don't try... But we certainly can lose... Nicely done, m'dear friend...

Irish Rose
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10 posted 2002-02-03 09:38 PM

Loved this!

Kathleen--(Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

11 posted 2002-02-04 07:07 AM

Thank you all so very much.

suthern

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12 posted 2002-02-04 09:54 AM

This is excellent, sailor... you've written well of one whose indecision makes the decision for him... he stands immobile looking at all the paths he could have chosen. But yanno??? Sometimes thinking of what might have been is better than remembering what was... he missed the heights but also missed the depths of despair... for making a choice doesn't guarantee making the right one. *S*

Now yassee what you've done??? You've gone and made me think... and you KNOW how tough that is for a blonde! LOL Great work, sailor... I enjoyed it much!

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