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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2002-02-01 05:33 AM

perhaps it was the teeshirt
that was too short
to reach your hips
you called it your schedule
and it was obvious
you didn't wear any time
under it
just for me

or the virgina slims
rolled up in the sleeve
on the arm
with the lipstick tattoo
of a woman's name
called chance
and the fishnet skirt
that you bought
just for me

you said you couldn't leave
cereal on the stove
for your kids
and that going on a crime spree
with me
to rob bowling alley workers
that sprayed shoes for tips
was too spooky for you to risk
even though you knew
my flesh colored squirt gun
was already empty

you straddled your six foot fence
with seven foot legs
comfortable on the phalic pickets
afraid to break the suction
by standing up
and giveing me
a better view
of that place you didn't cover
on your schedule

and by the way
your kids called
from the drive through
at wolfgang pucks
to say there was a fire
in the kitchen
something about the cornflake box
on the jenair
and they would be home late

©Dark

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-02-01 09:06 AM

I have absolutely no idea what you mean here, but the images you create in my mind are amazing......

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2002-02-01 09:23 AM

that is a good thing...
it is a satire on timing
working things in
around excuses and have to stuff

thanks SEA

Apachecat906
Member

since 2001-09-04

Posts 217
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2002-02-01 09:50 AM

I have to agree with SEA, there are some really great lines in here, and it leaves me wondering what you mean exactly, but thinking that the story must be interesting.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

4 posted 2002-02-01 10:00 AM

Dark, is this an affaire to remember ...or what. Can I use these excuses in a note to my teacher?
I loved these lines they are so smooth.
you straddled your six foot fence
with seven foot legs.
Kethry.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2002-02-01 10:22 AM

apachecat906,thank you so much...it is really about people fitting together in a busy schedule.

Kethry, please use the lines that will work
to keep you from having to stay after...affaire? hopefully some day...thanks my dear

Indigo
Senior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

6 posted 2002-02-01 02:31 PM

the ashes
of toasted cheerios
floated gently
out the window
while bowling pins
fell in erect abandon
blissfully unaware
that cereal holes
had no place
in a joint like this...
but x's and o's
have a way
of meeting
in the strangest places.

Liked this one, DS! Flesh-colored squirt gun?? *lol*

Indigo

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2002-02-01 04:39 PM

funny you would mention bowling pins
in the dream that inspired this
there were several

thank you for reading

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2002-02-01 07:51 PM

DS~

Sometimes, time can do that....are you published yet???

Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2002-02-01 08:01 PM

This is amazing! And...so very very sensual!
I love the way you coax the reader in...
and I shall just say thank you for this one before I start to ramble and blush all over the place.
*Nancy exits room, trying to look embarrassed while actually enjoying every feeling that the Dark Stranger had awakened in her.*

~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

10 posted 2002-02-01 09:25 PM

HEh heh heh, I must live in your kind of world dark, because I did undertand parts of it. Like hectic life. etc. real nice. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

11 posted 2002-02-01 09:50 PM

hmmm very unique writing!
You've captured my interest and curiousity

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

12 posted 2002-02-02 07:52 AM

Lauren, thank you..published? yes..here, with pride.

Nan, I love the blush, it is shamefully erotic, thank you

Strbbux, welcome to my thoughts, and thank you

Rosepetal, thank you for your words

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