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Wanting
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Wanting |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Wanting Wanting , waiting, wishing, weeping Craving, crying, cricket creaking Slowly slipping, slumber, sleeping Cunning cryptic crazed conception Dreadful dreaming, doubts, deception Devil’s deeds distort direction Bold betrayal, blistering, blind Madness marks the mordant mind Visions veil the vineyard’s vine Darkness draping dreary dawn Featheredfowl and forest fawn Lingering lull on lake and lawn Mallards mock the morning mist Spears of sunlight softly sift Lofty layers lightly lift Waking, wishing wanting weeping, Kind caresses, coming, creeping Softly slip, surround the sleeping Muddled madly murky mist In insanity’s insist Blessed was he with blinding bliss And she awoke to loving kiss Elizabeth Santos |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my goodness Liz! What an EXCEPTIONAL piece! The rhyme, the rhythm, the alliteration ... stupendous, you wonderful poet you! An absolute delight to read!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 WOW!!! Oh my gosh, I love it, I love it, I love it, this is excellent!!! The alliteration is perfect, your use of language makes the voice and spirit of this poem soooooooo breathtaking! I'm putting this in my library because it's soooooooo gorgeous, we all love you so much! (kiss on cheek) BRAVO!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
alliteration is awash, awesomely |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Very enjoyable read!Now if I can just get my tongue lined back up! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh my, Liz...this is fabulous. I've had days just like this, but couldn't write it, much less explain it. |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
This was an excellent read! It had fantatic rhyme and meter! The imagery was splendid and the closing was beautiful! Well done! Love, Bonnie |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LovelyLizzieLady~ Poetic praise from Florida flows Gratuitously graced alliteration aglow~ Rocking rhyme delighting day Admiration abounds such sounding sounds~ *Huge Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
elizabeth, wow, this is great!  |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh my gosh Liz, you have got quite a brain my dear lady, fantastic, floria Floria |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you, dear poet friends for your exuberant comments to a poem I htough nobody would like. THanks so much. I appreciate your comments Liz |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Not only did I like it - I understood it, and in awe at the talent you have as a poet once again! ~* Carpe' Diem *~ |
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Chrissy Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 81Idaho, no I am not a farmer! |
This is great, is sounds really good read aloud too! very sweet Dance like noone is watching |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Elizabeth Just a little work of alliteration genius here. I love the way it ends! Very tastefully done as usual..........just an awesome conception of poetic form! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent job, Elizabeth! Well done! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
All I'm "wanting" is to read more of your exquisite work Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm smiling... I am..  This is a bit out of character for you - and I like it.. (I like the others too, of course)...  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all for reading and commenting. If Nan is smiling, then so am I Liz |
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