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Martie
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0 posted 2002-01-30 12:48 PM



Moon Sail Away


A celestial glow disturbed the room
and in its fade a shadow bloomed
as if this light took up some space
and beguiled the air with an embrace  

so I crossed the bedroom’s gloom
into the refracted space of moon
that grazed the sky in watchful glean
and took me to a peaceful dream

leaving behind the wilted pillow
and moving over the silver willow
just a beam of purest pale
leaning into dreams a sail

then serene in the between
to flow with gilded butterfly wing
with dust of wishes made today
across the trail of milky way

Would that I could stay this flight
and be a follower of this light
though robin song would gather dust
against the bushes in cobwebs thrust

and my dear heart who still sleeps on
would reach out and find me gone
so I choose the breaking day
and the moon sailing away away

the moon sailing away

___
7-19-2000

© Copyright 2002 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-01-30 12:52 PM


SweetSis~
You've been Luna-ticked !
I love it~
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 2002-01-30 12:53 PM



Ah, new to me, hadn't caught this one before, so very glad you brought it back to light, enjoyed the play on words, as "a sail" also came across as assail and the light bright white of the moon can do just that...

big smiles here, Martie...

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3 posted 2002-01-30 01:00 PM


Very pretty!

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

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4 posted 2002-01-30 01:35 PM




(smiles) Ooohhhhhh...such beautiful imagery fills your words, sweet friend, Lady Luna spread sher glitter through every word you write! (kiss on cheek) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, this is a true dreamy treasure! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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5 posted 2002-01-30 06:54 PM


then serene in the between
to flow with gilded butterfly wing
with dust of wishes made today
across the trail of milky way
==============================

*sigh*  




(ps--I havent forgotten about the prose you posted...its been mad crazy here. I cant wait to read it)

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6 posted 2002-01-30 07:03 PM


No one can do this like you can, Martie...
Beautiful and perfect poetry!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

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7 posted 2002-01-31 05:28 PM


Nice work, Martie.  Enjoyed the imagery very much. *hugs*

Michael

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8 posted 2002-02-01 06:52 PM


A choice between the sun and the moon... Such a dilemma... and you make it seem so simple...
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9 posted 2002-02-05 04:20 AM


I like this, all sad and lyrical at once.
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10 posted 2002-02-05 12:58 PM


Marty,
This is so beautiful.  I haste to make a copy and share with my friends.
Hugs,
Joe

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11 posted 2002-02-05 01:08 PM


Martie, this is so very nice. floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
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12 posted 2002-02-05 01:26 PM


Awwwwwww, this is so cool, I just love the way you write, love it!

Joanna

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13 posted 2002-02-05 01:29 PM


Martie,
Your writing is as pretty as you are.

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14 posted 2002-02-05 02:26 PM


A lovely piece on peace, Martie!

Cor

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15 posted 2002-02-06 04:09 PM


you never fail to disappoint with your talent for imagery and excellence in writing!

Kathleen--(Kay)
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16 posted 2002-02-06 11:41 PM


What a treasure this was this evening, thank you Martie.

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catch his own breath."
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