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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2002-01-28 02:58 PM


Making Love

-always this ridiculous obsession with love
                                         Moulin Rouge

-not with a bang but a whimper
                               T.S. Eliot

Love defined:
a lesser knead
Love we breathe
yet, love we leave

Love defined:
a lesser shade
but what if Love
Is all we’ve made?
Some would scoff
Yet some would cough
And pat us on the sleeve

How can I
Write of Love
When plastered walls
And smoke above
Affix their terms
Where eyes enfold
Cannot disguise
A strangled hold

For Love is tender paradox
Some would keep it in a box
Where tissue waits in fond farewell
For some it’s just a kiss and tell

Here, I’ve taken on this fate
To be the one who’ll always wait
Love is waving in my face
I cannot breathe
I cannot place
I only know my heart will race
Race to write it down for now
Race to weave a knitted brow

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (01-28-2002 03:03 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-01-28 03:09 PM




BRAVO!!! Wow, this is soooooooo powerfully expressed, sweet friend, I've never seen love at this way, but I know deep down if we continue to breathe love and wear our heart upon our sleeve while both protecting it with reason, we will find happiness and true love always! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walter, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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2 posted 2002-01-28 03:17 PM


Walt, yer deep, yanno that? This is a wistful rendering of a timeless argument of head and heart. Loved it!
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3 posted 2002-01-28 03:36 PM


ohh i like this walt, very throught-provoking.

my heart races too oh yuh

wayoutwalt
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4 posted 2002-01-28 04:46 PM


thank you now go tell your friends o yuh
elisaseyes
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5 posted 2002-01-28 08:20 PM


You wrote this at school right and you were thinking of making love?
Honeybee
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6 posted 2002-01-28 08:24 PM



This is very strong, profound writing!  I love your style

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2002-01-29 06:07 PM


For Love is tender paradox
Some would keep it in a box
Where tissue waits in fond farewell
For some it’s just a kiss and tell


I wish love was waving in my face..but other than that..I loved the above verse and you did a wonderful job expressing love..
*s

Maureen

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