Open Poetry #18 |
Silence Of A Scream |
ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
They say that songs of love turn heartbeats into scores. But I'm feeling like a singer whose words are lacking worth. My mind goes spinning backwards when her sweet lips speak my way. and I pray for some inner strength to say what I should say. Her beauty stalls my reason when her eyes look straight through me then I see her with some other guy so I never speak my piece. Like a curse that blankets virtue I speak through a ghost of words and though they might seem open they're not what I want heard. Chorus: So if truth makes the best of love then silence is a scream but I can't seem to open up and let it out of me. I'm lost and lonely deep inside the silence of a scream. She comes to me so pleasently and her words of choice thrill me. I vision her within a space where my heart is filled with peace where I tell her everything I feel beyond my foolish pride but then I feel that same old hurt when she's with the other guy So if truth makes the best of love then silence is a scream but I can't seem to open up and let it out of me. I'm lost and lonely deep inside the silence of a scream The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I heard this silent scream from the far and wide of the song from which it came...well done Ethome...I'm liking this VERY much. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric...I think you let a bit of the heart break around the scream out in this song of tormented love. Wonderful writing, as always..and a haunting refrain. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
this is a great song! I saw a movie yesterday on hbo and this poem could've fit perfectly on the soundtrack Nice writing |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Eric, this is beautiful but soooooo very sad, my heart goes out to the silence in your heart and I pray that her whisper will come to you and forever fill your heart with echoes of loves promise! (sigh) We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart sweet Eric, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is wonderfully written... Eric... Always a pleasure to read you... Regards, sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Her beauty stalls my reason when her eyes look straight through me then I see her with some other guy so I never speak my piece. Like a curse that blankets virtue I speak through a ghost of words and though they might seem open they're not what I want heard. Chorus: So if truth makes the best of love then silence is a scream but I can't seem to open up and let it out of me. I'm lost and lonely deep inside the silence of a scream. ========================================== E-babes is singing some powerful blues... this just aches off the page...haunting. I can hear the wailing guitars and even a harmonica crying ... very cool song Eric...so deep and emotive. A good "cry in your beer" song I'm like a broken record that you can play ... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wonderful lyrics.I was crooning along (in silence, of course) I loved it! Liz |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
you have put the scream into song lyrics, I have pondered the scream by Munch for many years, bravo! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Eric this is just simply awesome darlin...just awesome |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
"So if truth makes the best of love then silence is a scream but I can't seem to open up and let it out of me. I'm lost and lonely deep inside the silence of a scream" ------------------ Wow! This is a beautiful melancholy...this really touches me more than I can explain at the moment~ Into my library this goes Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Eric, the scream is heard, and felt. I sure wish I could hear you sing and play this one. "Chorus: So if truth makes the best of love then silence is a scream but I can't seem to open up and let it out of me. I'm lost and lonely deep inside the silence of a scream." You're just screaming with emotion in this chorus, and some of us not only heard, but remembered. PS. I 'borrowed' the title and included it into a medley of titles. Plese don't sue! [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (01-30-2002 01:07 AM).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
damn!! great write!! you going to put this to music? i'd love to hear it! |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I forgot to add this to my library |
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