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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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*Inspired* Oh dance! Madame Butterfly dance behind Shoji screens of romance sway gracefully, in silk kimono winds bathe within a sandalwood breeze flutter exotic fans of sadness upon creamy sweet lotus petals silhouettes kiss rice lanterns of night disgraced, dancing a solo flight flutter shattered fans of despair a finale in soft koto air love will not embrace your heart again beneath a lantern of an origami moon dragons breathe fire of moonlight upon a page of geisha teardrops in night You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses. -Ziggy [This message has been edited by Victoria (01-27-2002 09:21 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, your heavenly imagery always make sme smile and daydream of the most inspiring things! (kiss on cheek) You are soooooo romantic, sweet friend, may this lantern of love forever hang in your heart and shine with eternal radiance! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Victoria, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You create the prettiest pictures, your choice of words always capture the moment so well. This is lovely Victoria~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* when one dances alone behind a screen I guess love cannot reach out to embrace them...This poem really touched me deeply...very deeply...your vision is so true and painted with such perfection. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Victoria, you create some of the most enchanting imagery! I love the way this is all tied together, a heart wrapped up kimono tight underneath a sad lantern light. "flutter exotic fans of sadness upon creamy petals of a sweet lotus silhouettes kiss rice lanterns of night" I remember seeing Madame Butterfly when I was 12 years old. It still has an enormous impact on me. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Victoria, your words. Oh your words. I have none. lovely, floria Floria |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you noah..i had alot of inspiration for this one..hugss Ms.Serenade..thank you im glad you enjoyed this one.. i enjoyed writing it..hugss Karen..thank you..im glad you were touched by it appreciate your sweet comments karen hugs midnitesun..i would love to see it again its been a long long time..nice of you to peek in..hugs floria..thank you for your nice compliments.. its not as easy as it may look haa..i like to edit my poems as best as i can before posting and i end up changing alot..hugss |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is delightfully inspired! Well done, Victoria! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Beautiful as usual Victoria, I have a question though. Why do you start each piece of work with a question mark? Just wondering Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you sunshine..im glad you enjoyed kethry...thanks..you must be in netscape..cause i noticed whenever im in netscape and not explorer there is a question mark there..strange isnt it..haa. You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
sway gracefully, in silk kimono winds bathe within a sandalwood breeze flutter exotic fans of sadness upon creamy petals of sweet lotus silhouettes kiss rice lanterns of night disgraced, dancing a solo flight flutter shattered fans of despair a finale in soft koto air love will not embrace your heart again beneath a lantern of an origami moon =============================== this is wonderful Victoria..and shows your diversity of vocabulary and imagery... What ever theme you write of, your words paint us such lovely visions. Beautiful poem and perfect execution of theme. well done poetess I'm like a broken record that you can play ... |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Very lovely, Vic. I love the Orient. -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Victoria~I love this piece and not just because Madame Butterfly is my favourite opera. I LOVE the way you write!! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Cyber~ (old time sake) This is beautifully inspired, and so lovely.... always...Lauren~ Step through the barrier of my mind, enter my soul, feel my desire, let my eyes guide you into the shadows of my heart [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-26-2002 10:51 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
If I didn't know better...I would think that you have been to Japan...I spent three years there...and enjoyed every minute...was pleasurable...and so is this poem... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I adore this! And you know that I'm lovin' the butterfly theme intermingled with the love (though the ending is sad). You use some creative and perfect phrasing in this... Excellent writting... Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Janet Marie..i love to write its my only hobby..and im happy that it is enjoyed by others too..appreciate your kind comments..looking forward to reading one of your soon..hugs newell..yes i love writing of the orient..i have a couple more i have written..thank you for peeking in newell Nancy...i will have to see the opera some time.. i would love to to hear all the music..thank you nancy hugss Lauren..  hidden one ha..old time sake ha..thanks Lauren..glad you liked hugsthank you barry..no i havent been there..im glad you enjoyed it though..and thank you for your sweet comments Melissa..thank you..appreciate your nice comments .. i enjoyed writing this piece..hugs |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It is a lovely image and metaphor, very unusual I enjoyed the read very much. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you kathleen hugss..glad you enjoyed ~Vic |
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