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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-01-25 09:55 PM

My lady...

Do you not see me here at the wall?
Do you care that my tears for you fall?
Does your heart not skip even one beat?
Will you allow me to bow at your feet?

I was born to be your knight and slave.
I was created to carry you from harm
I...your warrior...do stand here tall.
I wait to catch your heart in it’s fall.

Hear the whisper of my sighs to you.
In your ear, the bee..flying true.
Taking your nectar, the pollen stays
Oh my lady...these knightly ways.

Sleep my beauty, lie ever so still
Dream my lady, in our joy you will.
Listen to whispers......I love you!!!
Let the stars and moon fill the view.

Lie still...sleep my maid...I beg thee.
For beneath you I will stand faithfully.
My duty shall keep harm from your eye.
You..in peaceful rest, in slumber lie.

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

1 posted 2002-01-25 09:59 PM

"Sleep my beauty, lie ever so still
Dream my lady, in our joy you will.
Listen to whispers......I love you!!!
Let the stars and moon fill the view."

A Knight in shining armour I presume, absolutely divine Magnus. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

2 posted 2002-01-25 10:03 PM

Magnus darling boy if anyone knows how to write beauty it’s you. This is sooooooooo amazing a wonderful piece of writing that’s truly absolutely fabulous. The flow of this is outstanding as smooth as water over glass

Wonderful writing darling boy utterly utterly wonderful. And as usual your writing is perfect, not a beat out of place.

Bravi Bravi Bravissimi

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

3 posted 2002-01-25 10:06 PM

*sigh* romance and fantasy...what can be better than that...A lucky lady, Lou, is to have you as her knight in shining armour. **big hugs**

I love the romance in this poem.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

4 posted 2002-01-25 10:09 PM

a beautiful statement of Love.... the knight watching his lady sleep.... wonderful!!

(i dunno about the "slave" thing, tho, but it would be terrific to find a man to occasionally take out the garbage... LOL)

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2002-01-25 10:17 PM

Lie still...sleep my maid...I beg thee.
For beneath you I will stand faithfully.
My duty shall keep harm from your eye.
You..in peaceful rest, in slumber lie.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Barry! How on earth could one sleep after reading this! Besides I was going into mass panic mode after you went 'poof', but, now I know it was your puter! I'm trying hard to relax now...pulse rate is slowing down...LOL...gee, I'm glad you're still here!
Hugs, Nancy.

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

A Whisper's Caress
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since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

6 posted 2002-01-25 10:20 PM

goodness, the king of passion and sweet romance....

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

7 posted 2002-01-25 10:41 PM

Magnus...Beautiful and softly alluring. I LOVED THIS!!! You always write with such heart and passion. ***Ivy Rose

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

8 posted 2002-01-25 10:48 PM

This is truly romantic, Barry.
Thank you for your kind reply, as you can see
I'm having a hard time shutting this off

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Silver Streak
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since 2002-01-02

Posts 3625
FL, USA

9 posted 2002-01-25 10:56 PM

Beautiful!

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2002-01-25 10:58 PM

(sigh) Soooooooo beautiful and chivalrous, sweet friend, may you always be the knight of her heart and may you forever offer your lady sweet love and trust as she will always love you! (big huggsssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

11 posted 2002-01-26 12:19 PM

This is so very romantic, Barry...
It shows you as a wonderful, caring man.
My husband is like that too!
He takes such very good care of me.
Your poem reminded me very much of him...and I loved it!h

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

12 posted 2002-01-26 12:35 PM

Magnus,
You are one die hard romantic. But then again...you do it so well! Thanks for the write.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

13 posted 2002-01-26 08:12 AM

Magnus, here's my challenge for I am not into critiquing today...

take this poem and work it with the "language of the time" for the Knight and his Lady...

I like this the way it is, but I would really like to see you do that....

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

14 posted 2002-01-26 08:48 AM

Does not my words fit thine eyes well.
Mayest not my rhyme feed thou as I do?
Giveth me but what thee desire most best
and from this heart I shall pen of old.

Thanx Kari, I so much do want to write
that style...I just don't know all the
words....HELP!!!!

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

15 posted 2002-01-26 09:37 AM

Barry~

Another beautiful write to treasure.....

Lauren~

Thoughts slide out
of hiding and cling
to anything I put
in front of them.
Words bead up
like dew and in
a moment,
will be accessible.

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-26-2002 09:37 AM).]

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

16 posted 2002-01-26 10:06 AM

Well, you have captured the heart of your lady, I have no doubt. And all who read this, in the process.
Sandra

sodpossom
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since 2001-06-15

Posts 723
N.C

17 posted 2002-01-26 10:09 AM

King of romance.Well done!

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

18 posted 2002-01-27 06:15 PM

MAGNUS!! a knight for any day..time frame be damned! lol i think this is wonderful!! (and easier to understand than the speach of knight times! lol)

such romance...ah sweet romance....*sigh*

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"and i'd give up forever to touch you..cause i know you can feel me somehow..." -googoo dolls

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