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Since You've Gone,,,,My very first poem
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Since You've Gone,,,,My very first poem |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859
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i got the idea from brian, this is my first poem ever written after my son died, It is dated May 23,2001 Thanks for the idea brian ************************************************* Since You've Gone I never feel the sun I never feel the rain All I feel is pain Since you've gone. My son , I miss you so I never thought you'd go Before me. The precious years you spent with me I'll cherish for all eternity. You are so loved You are so missed Floria |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Floria, for a first poem...beautiful.. I don't remember my first...but I do know it was about my favorite subject...LOVE and romance... Your first is touching...enjoyed. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is such a sad but beautiful first poem from your loving heart that comes to show you have always had a golden heart filled with love and compassion that shines in all your words! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, my prayers and love are always with you, God Bless You! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Floria, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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brianbeaudry Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 410Northern Ontario Canada |
Such sadness in this touching poem Floria...a parent's worst nightmare is to outlive their children...Hugz of compassion dear friend...brilliant and emotional first write!!! |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Floria, It is very hard to believe that you've only been writing for a year or more. If I posted my first poem, it would be in printed handwriting as I was twelve. It was about a donkey. My second at 15 was for my dad. I think love makes a big difference in the outcome. It shows through every line you write. The one about my dad was a big improvement for me too. I hope the pain eases with every line you dedicate to his memory. Cheryl |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
In my own small way, I understand this today. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Thanks Magnus, I would imagine that your first was about romance since you are so good at writing that. thanks. floria Floria |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Thank you Noah, I only went digging into my files for the first because I got the idea from brian. It would be nice to see everyones first. thanks friend. floria Floria |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Thank Brian for your compassion and your hugs. and for the idea to dig out my first poem. Yes it is a nightmare undescribable to lose a child no matter the age. It just doesn't seem fair. floria Floria |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Thank you kindly Cheryl, yes, I was frightened at first, it was as if someone else was inside me writing. Now I love to write. And you are right. Deep feelings of love, passion, sorrow, I find that is what brings the words from the soul. floria Floria |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Dear Duncan thank you, floria Floria |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Floria...this is an amazing first poem...you probably had the gift all along, but it took the sadness of losing your son to bring it out. I wrote my first one when I was six years old...it was about my new baby sister. It is so stupid that I would never even let anyone see it...it was written on the inside cover of one of my Dad's poetry books (my Dad loved to read poetry) I've written poetry ever since then...but on and off.....and since my first husband died, in May of 99, I haven't stopped writing...and I don't ever plan to. But you...are amazing! I hope that writing has been as therapeutic for you as it has been for me.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Madame Chipmunk,Thank you so very much. Yes, I was very fearful at first, I didn't understand "who" was writing inside me. It seemed my fingers just moved, It was eery. But I went with the flow, and today I am very grateful that I write,It has been the best therapy ever..thanks for your kind words.Floria Floria |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
I can't even imagine my little boy dying before me.Like I said before my heart and prayers are with you! |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Thank you sodpossom, whether they are little or grown it is still very hard. A parent never imagines that they will have to bury one of their children. and the worst part is when it is sudden, without warning. thanks for you kindness. floria Floria |
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