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Into The Valley Below
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Into The Valley Below |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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I cannot come to you, I am bound to lie here. I cannot feel your love, see your salted tear. I wish that I could simply rise to you and say but death has come, taken my voice this day. I lie in an open field, a field of clover green. I lie twisted and covered in blood’s red sheen. My life stopped as a bullet tore apart my heart My mind fuzzy, became dark as death did start. The sound of the bugle’s tune fades far away The roar of the cannon mouth, left yesterday. Black-winged birds soar high, black coal eye. Smelling the stench of death as onward they fly. I keep your lock of hair within my clenched hand. I feel the softness of it, see your eyes as you stand. I hear the faint call from within the lights above. I walk to the light, forever bathed in your love. Into the crimson valley below I charge gallantly Into the hail of lead flying I ride and die for thee. The meadow green shall absorb my rotting shell as soaring black coal eye birds shall dine well |
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brianbeaudry Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 410Northern Ontario Canada |
Great imagery in this poem my friend...,made me think of the charge of the light brigade.Well done!!! [This message has been edited by brianbeaudry (01-25-2002 08:33 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big huggssssssss) Oh Barry, I can feel tears behind these words, this is such a haunting but beautiful poem from you golden heart! (sigh) I hope all is well with you and joy and love fills your heart everyday now, you deserve the greatest happiness always! We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A very old world feel, Magnus...very powerful, gripping... thank you for sharing... |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
fantastic write...but than again, I pretty much expected that |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Magnus, very sad and sorrowful poem. So well expressed.It did bring tears. floria Floria |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Barry Such exquisite imagery shone through your very sad words.....beautiful! Take care...Sue Suetang |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is soft, delicate, burns with longing. Very nicely done, Barry. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A beautifully written, poetic tale of love and old fashioned gallantry... Very sad,Barry but I really liked it!  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius "poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks [This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (01-27-2002 05:38 PM).] |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow....awesome write my friend...imagery perfect.. much enjoyed! hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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