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Naught Presumed |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Naught Presumed comfort can disappear rapidly ~ or over time ~ as dependability in the moment is vanquished to a gray existence which comes so very slowly akin to macular degeneration of the soul she wonders what kind of surgical procedure would bring back the zeal and zest that which was once thought as best or was it only what their minds made of it oh to get back the simplest of pleasures when touch was treasured when comfort was found in the smile when a day could pass in light when nothing was taken for granted but the electric is gone words are sodden ~ regret most plentiful ~ 'tho smiles are given publicly in light just not during night when it would be best how did this come to pass? he said thoughts aloud she kept thoughts quietly proud and kept his words before her and noted shorter apologies but longer analogies of all things gone wrong wondering when naught became presumed 01.07.01 [Inspired by the movie CastAway...which led to these thoughts....] |
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brianbeaudry Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 410Northern Ontario Canada |
This is such a powerful write!!! ..yes indeed, when did rapture and romance disappear and why?? Love, like anything else in life needs nuture by both, without it, it dies.You have penned this one well!!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--You have seen into a relationship's fail with stunning precision...sometimes a shipwreck is what is needed to see the light. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Karilea, this is sooooo sad, I too saw the movie Castaway and it is soooo heartbreaking to see Tom Hanks character lose his wife after that plane crash and abandoning everything he was behind, like so many other relationships do! (sad sigh) My heart cries out to all broken-hearted lovers and I pray that the simple pleasures can aagin come and greet them welcomingly with loves promise! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderfully written! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!    May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oh how tragic it is when we start to age and things are not as they once were...I felt that in this poem...Kari, this is a very beautifully penned poem...Thank You!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So many mirrors.................. AND YOU ...where have you been??? HMMMM???? Just how long were we supposed to be with out Sunshine in here????  Here we heard something about server trouble...and you were off at the movies LOL Bout time Sun warmed us I'm like a broken record that you can play ... |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Sunshine, this was straight from the heart. The only way to keep love alive, is to love with the heart unconditionally, as God loves us. Like with my family, They can do no wrong in my eyes. This was a wonderful poem. floria Floria |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari darling sister of my soul Oh my goodness do I know the darkness of the soul this lies in. Castaway indeed and what a long time he was away too No wonder his soul got dark. how did this come to pass? he said thoughts aloud she kept thoughts quietly proud and kept his words before her and noted shorter apologies but longer analogies of all things gone wrong You have no idea how close these words were to my heart at one time. Thankfully I’m not in the dark anymore. You know this is utterly utterly first class writing darling girl truly this deserves a standing ovation Yes I love it love it love it, Fabulous writing,   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* all that the heart can do is weep for what once was filled with life but now is turning to dust...My heart goes out to anyone experiencing the end of a once loving relationship. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
how did this come to pass? he said thoughts aloud she kept thoughts quietly proud and kept his words before her and noted shorter apologies but longer analogies of all things gone wrong wondering when naught became presumed ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Karilea! This is a fantastic write! You have a very unique style of writing and I for one just love it! Enjoyed this one so much! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Gotta say that I sure like the Sunshine best. Although I know that everyone has storms, but can we not fly over them? And if two souls drift apart, we can either dwell on the sadness, or we can go where the sunshine is. What good is sadness chasing sadness? And is there any age to a spirit? Only our physical body ages and if we let our spirit chase our body, we are ordering sadness, are we not? Give me Sunshine or give me death! For Sunshine IS Liberty  -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Most interesting comments, and thank you for the chuckles from some of you. I find it interesting that my mind is always so full of "stuff" that when I read my own work from a year or so back, I can hardly relate...but am so glad that YOU can. Thank you all for reading! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
<font face="monotype corsiva">~* Carpe' Diem *~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful writing Sunshine...James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah! the pleasure in reading your words is incredible.... Thanks, my friend for sharing your poetry... Regards, Karilea, Sudhir |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Well written, Karilea! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ 'oh to get back the simplest of pleasures when touch was treasured when comfort was found in the smile when a day could pass in light' Lovely thoughts~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I could swear this could be about a fading marriage..but..maybe my heart is making things appear that aren't? *sigh* Still sad, Sunshine! I love it though! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Wait for eye contact that brings an electrical bolt to your heart. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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