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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-01-25 09:50 AM


not often do I admire
jewelry
when worn by a woman
to distract the eye
from the natural
of subtle and round

until now that is
those simple beads
glistening exotic
god shaped gems
carfully placed
to seperate

the longing of my eyes
from the willing
of your secret gifts
that are offered
with embarassed glance
those beads of desire

that moisten satin skin

©Dark

© Copyright 2002 ©Dark 2k - All Rights Reserved
sodpossom
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1 posted 2002-01-25 10:15 AM


Very vivid and well written!Nice job!
Victoria
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2 posted 2002-01-25 10:16 AM


Sensuous images DS..pearls of desire

               ~Victoria~

You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses.

                                                -Ziggy

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2002-01-25 10:16 AM


thanx sir, I appreciate the review
Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2002-01-25 10:17 AM


ms V, thank you for your read
The Jackal
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5 posted 2002-01-25 10:32 AM


really liked this one,especially this part
"until now that is
those simple beads
glistening exotic
god shaped gems
carfully placed
to seperate"
    i think its perfect,great work

no longer afraid of the dark
       or mid day shadows  
nothing so ridiculously
     teenage and desperate

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2002-01-25 10:43 AM


Thank you my friend
A Tone of Voice
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7 posted 2002-01-25 10:58 AM


hmmmmm, now this curves in the right places~!

enjoyed


Atov

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2002-01-25 11:10 AM


thank you ATOV
Martie
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9 posted 2002-01-25 11:56 AM


DS...I have a black opal I wear most of the time, not to distract, but to enhance.  Enjoyed your poem!
Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2002-01-25 12:04 PM


lovely I imagine
the contrast
of dark to pale?

thank you

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11 posted 2002-01-25 04:12 PM


not often does one such as you come along...to fill our eyes with your treasure of words....


Lauren~

Twas not into my ears you whispered
but into my heart.
Twas not my lips you kissed,
but my soul

Kethry
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12 posted 2002-01-25 04:14 PM


DS,
it was a pleasure to read this treasure
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Zinsser
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13 posted 2002-01-25 04:30 PM


very well done...... enjoyed
Dark Stranger
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14 posted 2002-01-25 05:38 PM


Lauren, thank you sweet lady for your reading and replies.

Kethry, am pleased to be a good read on this, thank you

Zinsser, arrigoto my friend

Casidy
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15 posted 2002-01-27 03:25 PM


wow, I could almost see you looking at them... very nice imagery...

very lovely piece...

more please.


Enchantress
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16 posted 2002-01-27 03:34 PM


OH MY!!!  This is....this is....soooo very well done!  YES!!  
~Hugs......more please!?~

*Nancy looks away quickly...rather embarrassed.*

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Irish Rose
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17 posted 2002-01-27 04:58 PM


very sensual thoughts, I love it, don't wear much jewelry
but the way you've written this I may start!

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

dgvarner
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18 posted 2002-01-27 06:06 PM


DAMN!! (OOPS!  sorry...that was my first reaction.... )

very sensual..very nice...great imagery...much enjoyed...!!

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"and i'd give up forever to touch you..cause i know you can feel me somehow..." -googoo dolls

[This message has been edited by dgvarner (01-27-2002 06:07 PM).]

Dark Stranger
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19 posted 2002-01-28 09:38 AM


Casidy, Thank you for your gentle review

Enchantress, it is a pleasure to blush you slightly

Ms Rose, and to you a rose with hungry eyes
to view your gems

DGvarner, I kiss the damn from your finger lips...thank you

rosepetals25
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20 posted 2002-01-28 05:29 PM


Dark,

   You know I like this *sighs*

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

Dark Stranger
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21 posted 2002-01-28 06:49 PM


Ms Tara...I wait for your visits and worship your comments...thank you so much
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