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Giving Advice |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The bar was a dark dismal place, So much so that it was almost lightless, It was hard to see another’s face Through that smoky near darkness. The bartender was well past her prime, Probably never told she was pretty at all, Except by patrons at closing time Trying to extend drinking’s last call. Her voice was slightly harsh and rough From years of smoking and yelling, For there were times she had to be tough To the drunks in their stupor rebelling. On a slow night in the near empty bar, When the sound was the machine that made ice, Or the rumbling of a slow passing car She might take the time to give advice. Always starting with a disclaimer That she didn’t always do things just right But I’d never think to blame her For her life had been quite a fight. Boy friends and children that ran away Leaving her alone times she couldn’t track, The reason she didn’t know or wouldn’t say, But she didn’t want any of them back. She’d tell you what she might do Forget them all they aren’t worth ..it, If they don’t want to stay with you Just go ahead and let them quit. Finally the bar’s dark would be complete, Her advice was way for her to cope, As I walked toward home down the street, I knew she was another without any hope. What can be done for those in the darkness When they don’t want to look to the light, They are afraid of the burning brightness And hide their souls from anyone’s sight. Gloom |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Gloom, You took me to a place that I never go to..A bar. I felt as I was there, almost smelling the liquor and smoke. Sad it was for the bartender. good write. Floria |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling here...advice wrapped in advice! And there's so much awesome detail here, it's kind of hard to believe you haven't been there? hmmmm....a great characterization and portraiture of word. I am keeping this one.  |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
it's hard to hide from yourself for long.....tends to catch up to you at some point |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Strbbux, Not a normal place for me, but I go the occasionally, Around here there is one on every corner. Thank you, Serenity, What makes you think I haven’t been there, this got a bit longer than normal for me since it was touch more complex than some of my others. Pleased to please you with it. Thank you, Zinsser, You are correct, hard to him from one’s self. Gloom |
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